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Living The Life Chapter One

author: brianstlouis date: 05/16/2008 category: junkyard
rating: 7.6 / votes: 19 
POSTED: 05/16/2008 - 10:39 am
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Fritz621 :
1ST!!!!! is this like a Flogging Molly type band?
POSTED: 05/16/2008 - 11:35 am / quote |
twistedmaggot :
tl;dr
inspired by Nolan?

POSTED: 05/16/2008 - 12:05 pm / quote |
asterisk_corpse :
I dig it
POSTED: 05/16/2008 - 12:06 pm / quote |
slann101 :
*cough* comeback van*cough*
POSTED: 05/16/2008 - 12:07 pm / quote |
Fritz621 :
lol slann
POSTED: 05/16/2008 - 02:02 pm / quote |
musiclover_92 :
Flogging Molly type hopefully
POSTED: 05/16/2008 - 03:30 pm / quote |
prateak :
cool! keep it goin'

POSTED: 05/17/2008 - 02:10 am / quote |
Revalk :
Good job, but I'm not nuts about this installment anyways. Hints at a bit of stuff, and other then that, basically does a step by step run down to intialize some setting and characters. Could have been brought forward less like information, and more like a story. Cheers though. Just constructive critism.
POSTED: 05/19/2008 - 05:25 am / quote |
manwithplan :
yeh are u irish your self? cause im guessing your not, cause u are making out these people to be very stereotypical. "building cabins, catching snakes, fishing in the pond and watching the sun" and the word lad is way over used, yes it is venacular, but it isn't a word they always use in ireland either. unless u live in cork :P jakes nice start tho
POSTED: 05/19/2008 - 09:02 am / quote |
FionnRuadh :
yeah do yisser research on irish slang di ya kno wa i mean?
we dont be saying aye a lot either
unless your from the north

POSTED: 05/20/2008 - 11:51 am / quote |
Y0UNGBL00D :
lol it's pronounced "oirish"

from a pure story telling standpoint, i felt this was too dramatic too quick. i mean, this installment stuff has to tell stuff quick, i know, but i was immediately put off by the steretypical melodrama of the "troubled artist" thing. if nolan could write as intelligently as you do, and you could spread details and build tension like he does, there would be some truly good stuff going on. anyway, thanks for entertaining me while on my way back to the states. us navy folk need every kind of thing like this we can get our hands on!!! cheers

POSTED: 05/20/2008 - 03:59 pm / quote |
Mettliccaa :
Good story, but it seems that the paragraphs are too forced. It kind of reduces the flow.
POSTED: 05/20/2008 - 07:12 pm / quote |
zerodeck :
way too much drama, it went by in a flash (and not in a good way) and it's way too stereotypical
POSTED: 05/21/2008 - 09:58 am / quote |
Metal_Rich :
Mettliccaa wrote:

Good story, but it seems that the paragraphs are too forced. It kind of reduces the flow.

zerodeck wrote:

way too much drama, it went by in a flash (and not in a good way) and it's way too stereotypical

+1 to both

POSTED: 05/21/2008 - 11:22 am / quote |
Sharp_as_steel :
Am i the only one who noticed the band doesnt have a bass player?

This could be good, but I beg you, less sterotypes.

POSTED: 05/21/2008 - 02:14 pm / quote |
Dogos :
I was going to say about the bass player as well, i found it a little unbelievable that they would be playing the biggest club in town with no low end. Other than that its good, but subtle out the characters, don't tell us everything at once, thats what keeps us interested.
POSTED: 05/21/2008 - 02:54 pm / quote |
andy331 :
im not gonna lie here the beggining sounds like that part in the movie August Rush where the kids dad is playing a concert.....
POSTED: 05/21/2008 - 03:18 pm / quote |
Natrone :
hmm...i kinda like this...the band has a country rock kinda feel to it based on the description. lookin forward to the next one. maybe it'll be better
POSTED: 05/21/2008 - 11:45 pm / quote |
Natrone :
oh, and to you people that say its too steryotypical...im not irish or anything, but i do live in a small town and i know for a fact thats country life.
POSTED: 05/21/2008 - 11:47 pm / quote |
mavtx41 :
aye aye aye oy oy oy oy Okay but chill it on the aye's.
POSTED: 05/22/2008 - 11:09 am / quote |
07bevanm :
Hmm, If this were to be a cereal, it would be oatmeal or some equivilant - fufilling yet not to everyones tastes.
However Nolan White's work would be like the sugar rush from coco-pops or something
=) Im hungry

POSTED: 05/22/2008 - 11:25 am / quote |
queenofthenight :
Overall, I liked it.

Natrone's right- it's a good (sanitized) reflection of small town/country life. People build shit, watch the sunset and wildlife, catch snakes (my kid brother used to catch snakes and put a dot of paint on their tails to see if he ever caught the same one twice). There's a reason for the stereotypes.

You'll want to watch switching verb tenses, though, if this is something you intend to publish. That, watch the excessive use of "lad" and "aye" (once or twice in such a short piece is sufficient for flavor) and revisit the entire history bit. It's got kind of an info dump feel to it. Show, don't tell. Makes for a better story. Just call Adrien his brother- the anecdote and how Adrien was the one looking out for Austin imply older, and sibling is such an awkward word to drop into a story.

It's a good beginning.

POSTED: 05/22/2008 - 03:45 pm / quote |
Natrone :
it's a good (sanitized) reflection of small town/country life


Ya. Sanitized cuz (at least for now) he left out drinkin and stuff.

POSTED: 05/23/2008 - 12:11 am / quote |
mdawg24 :
Does anyone else think this was inspired by a mix August Rush and Nolan?

Good though, not capitvating, but entertaining.

POSTED: 05/23/2008 - 03:21 am / quote |
mdawg24 :
*captivating
POSTED: 05/23/2008 - 03:22 am / quote |
EpicSG :
Does anyone else think this was inspired by a mix August Rush and Nolan?

yep

POSTED: 05/23/2008 - 04:44 am / quote |
deargod12 :
andy331 wrote:

im not gonna lie here the beggining sounds like that part in the movie August Rush where the kids dad is playing a concert.....

i agree, that was the first thought that came to mind.
it's a good story, but slow down on the character development. they're not gonna disappear from your story if you don't want them to. the characters will fill themselves in as you continue to write.

POSTED: 06/23/2008 - 05:17 pm / quote |
 
 m 
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Checked.
POSTED: 07/11/2008 - 06:44 pm / quote |
brianstlouis :
By the way, I appreciate the constructive critisism and all, but I have no direction for this story. I'm not going to finish it, it's a ship that crashed and burned after only the first chapter. Thanks anyways.
POSTED: 07/13/2008 - 04:34 pm / quote |
Eddie's'Waitor :
Scottish say Aye more than irish
POSTED: 08/22/2008 - 01:04 pm / quote |
mamason282 :
not bad
POSTED: 08/29/2008 - 10:28 pm / quote |
HeavyReverb :
I've lived in 5 different counties and never heard anyone say "aye".
POSTED: 10/28/2008 - 07:31 pm / quote |
23dannybhoy23 :
You know, not all Irish people are rowdy singing drunks with or melancholic "aye-how-I-miss-the-old-country"-types who say "aye" at least once every sentence.
POSTED: 03/15/2009 - 04:11 pm / quote |
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