thrash sort of song with obvious metallica influences

[acrocks]

ok i'm back with another metal sort of song again i don't want people telling me to record it, this is because i won't. Constructive critisism is welcome, tell me where i've gone wrong and i will try to find time to crit yours


Intro
fast hammer n pull off
this bit slower and rhythmiclly sort of like seek and destroy
e|-------------------------------------------
B|-------------------------------------------
G|9p8p7--------------------------------------
D|-----9-8-7---------------------------------
A|----------9---9-8-7-------------7----------
E|-----------0-0-----9-0-0-9-8-7-9-9---------
PM ... ...

Verse
a lot faster/thrasheyer
e|-------------------------------------------
B|-------------------------------------------
G|-------------------------------------------
D|-5h7-5h7-5h7-3h5-5h7-5h7-5h7-7h9-----------
A|-0---0---0---0---0---0---0---0-------------
E|-------------------------------------------

e|-------------------------------------------
B|-------------------------------------------
G|-------------------------------------------
D|-5h7-5h7-5h7-3h5-5h7-5h7-5h7-7/8-----------
A|-0---0---0---0---0---0---0---7/8-----------
E|-------------------------------------------

e|-------------------------------------------
B|-------------------------------------------
G|-------------------------------------------
D|-5h7-5h7-5h7-3h5-5h7-5h7-5h7-7h9-----------
A|-0---0---0---0---0---0---0---0-------------
E|-------------------------------------------

e|----------------------------------------------
B|----------------------------------------------
G|---------------------------------5h7p5----8-7-
D|-5h7-5h7-5h7-3h5-5h7-5h7-5h7-5-7------7-6-----
A|-0---0---0---0---0---0---0--------------------
E|----------------------------------------------

Repeat that and then go into the chorus

e|-------------------------------------------
B|-------------------------------------------
G|-------------9-7-9-5---------------------------
D|-------------9-7-9-5---------------------------
A|-------------7-5-7-3---------------------------
E|-0-00000-000-----------------------------------------
PM . ..... ...

bridge/interlude whatever

e|---------14-------14--------14-------14-17b(19)-
B|-/17b(19)--17b(19)---17b(19)--17b(19)-----------
G|------------------------------------------------
D|------------------------------------------------
A|------------------------------------------------
E|------------------------------------------------

e|-14h17p14---14----------------|-------------------------14--------------|
B|----------17--17b(19)-14h17b14|-o----14-14-14h17p14-------14--14h17p14-o|
G|------------------------------|---16--------------16b(18)---------------|
D|------------------------------|-----------------------------------------|
A|------------------------------|-o--------------------------------------o|
E|------------------------------|-----------------------------------------|

then repeat

instead of that last part for the bridge then go on to play this, played very fast
PM ... ... ...
e|-------------------------------------------
B|-------------------------------------------
G|-------------------------------------------
D|-7---9---7---9-6---------------------------
A|-5---7---5---7-4---------------------------
E|--0-0-0-0-0-0------------------------------

solo
e|-7p4h7p4h7------7-6-6-----6-4-4---------------------------------
B|----------7-5-4----7-7-6-4---6-6-4-4h6p4-4----------------------
G|----------------------------------6-----6-6-4-4/3---------3/6---
D|---------------------------------------------7---6-4-3-4-6------
A|----------------------------------------------------------------
E|----------------------------------------------------------------
full bend
e|---------6h9p6-----------/----------
B|-----7-9------9-7-6--6-8/--6-6~~~~--
G|-7-6----------------8---------------
D|------------------------------------
A|------------------------------------
E|------------------------------------
full bend
e|---------------------------------------------------------------/---
B|--------------------------------------------------------------/----
G|-9-7-5-5h7p5~-9-7-5-5h7p5-5----------------------------------/-----
D|------7------------7-----7-7-5-8-7-5-------------------5-6-8/-6-6~-
A|------------------------------7-----8-7-5---------5-6-8------------
E|-----------------------------------------8-7-5-6-8-----------------
x4 x4
e|-10p9h10p9h12p9-||-12p11h12p11h14p12|12---/12---/13---/13---/14---/14---/--
B|o--------------o||o----------------o|--15/---15/---16/---16/---17/---17/---
G|----------------||------------------|--------------------------------------
D|----------------||------------------|--------------------------------------
A|o--------------o||o----------------o|--------------------------------------
E|----------------||------------------|--------------------------------------

e|-17B~~~~17-15~~~~14h15p14----17~~~~~17-15~~~~-14h15p14----------------
B|-------------------------17~~-------------------------15 (slow bend) -
G|----------------------------------------------------------------------
D|----------------------------------------------------------------------
A|----------------------------------------------------------------------
E|----------------------------------------------------------------------

then play intro and after a few times slide down to an e5 powerchord

All bends are full if i haven't labeled them

[jamminbass]

I'll crit this when I have more time..(probably tonight)

Looks good from what I can see though.

[NovemberRain273]

nice job man, its good. ur right about the metallica, the verse looks a lot like the four horsemen.

[bat69420]

I like it but the hammer ons w/ the droning string might sound better if instead of 7h9 it was 7h8 and if the 3h5 were 2h3 I like everthing else though.

Also, for the very first double p.m.s it might be good to only play one p.m.ed E so it would have a faster descending feeling.(i mean within the grouping for example 0 0 would be played like 0 the first tme)

[Murahilin]

sounds mundane.

[gutsman]

sounds good but a bit corny at some parts. The solo is good though (as far as I can see :p)

[Quid]

I only have an accoustic at my new house but from the part of the solo I was playing it was sounding pretty cool, even for a genre I dont really delve in.

[donender]

its good, but is seems a little cliched to me, try to make it sound a little more unusual (not sure how yet, i'll post when i come up with something)

[legions]

nicely done, i think it's not spectacular...but it's definitely something good. keep working on it, and you could have something great. ha. seriously

[phpn00bf4life]

Crit:

INTRO:
Pretty Good, some notes dont' really seem in place right, then again I'm not honestly a heavy metal guy so perhaps that is how it is supposed to sound?

Verse:
Awesome is all I can say. Nothing to change there imo.

Chorus:
Again good. Some more notes could probaly help it, but it is also good where it is at.

Interlude:
Not gonna lie, can't play this part (I'm still sort of a no0b :( )

Solo:
I love the solo, i think it's the best part of the song.


7/10 As stated earlier, a lil work and this will be way good ! gj.

(P.S. thanks for your crit of mine)

[Gohex]

Yes I enjoyed this.. It went good on my acoustic AND electric.. You have accomplished onto my 'the list' ;)

Nice job man, solo was pretty awesome, keep at it...

[xept]

hey.
i put the song into guitar pro and added bass, drums, and a bit rhytm guitar to it.

listen to mp3. file HERE (http://www.achene.hiya-host.com/data/slettes.MP3)

i must say that i like some parts of it. the solo needs a lot of work. the bridge is cool though.

just ask if anyone wants the guitar pro file.

Info on Guitar Pro file:
---------------------------
number of tracks:6
4 guitars
1 bass
1 drum set

[t2russo]

i ask what in gods name is that recording... that makes me not want to buy guitar pro... it sounds like someone shoving a polyphonic keyboard up their ass with no lube... jesus... it would be good if it actually was recorded on GUITAR... i like the notes tho, just guitar pro blows hard...

[xept]

well.. guitar pro 4 uses .midi. if you buy guitar pro 5 it will have a realistic sound engine.
anyways i prefer guitar pro 4 cause u dont use guitar pro to actually record - more like compose or practise. its 100 times better than using tabs for instance.
and anyways - guitar pro can show that theres something wrong with the solo. something doesnt fit right together. ive not played guitar for long but that i can hear.

[Gohex]

Ye, I use guitar pro, its very handy. But ye your song is nice man

[les_paul_01]

nice job man, its good. ur right about the metallica, the verse looks a lot like the four horsemen.

exactly what i was thinking

[ethereal sin]

It's ok. I thought the solo was great. And as for that GP file...Pretty painful.