my first rock-ish song


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sukajamie
02-15-2009, 01:28 PM
hi guys.

this is my first song that i wrote and would like to hear any feedback from you guys.
its more of a post-rock-ish kinda music so yeah...no shredding or whatsoever :P

hey...enjoy

Wolfinator-x
02-15-2009, 01:35 PM
It's pretty awesome! Do you intend to add in vocals?

Ic3
02-15-2009, 01:35 PM
Great song

sukajamie
02-15-2009, 01:36 PM
why thank you :)

wolf: i dont know....i never good with vocals. so i just gonna leave it be i guess

RiseAgainstScum
02-15-2009, 02:00 PM
The only thing I do not like is the repetition, it is pretty good otherwise.

edgespear
02-16-2009, 05:42 AM
That's really cool actually... I really like the harmonisation with the bass, especially in bars 3, 5 and 7 where it goes 11\9 9\7 :p:

sukajamie
02-17-2009, 07:09 AM
That's really cool actually... I really like the harmonisation with the bass, especially in bars 3, 5 and 7 where it goes 11\9 9\7 :p:

errrr i dont know what you're saying but thanks anyway! :)
i'm pretty much influenced by Caspian when i wrote this song.

The 7.18
02-17-2009, 10:57 AM
Wow, very cool! Only thing i could really say to improve it is maybe dont have the repeats so much, it gets a bit tedious when you hear the same thing over & over. What i'd suggest is maybe taking the repeats out, copy & pastng it as many times as you want it to repeat, and put subte differences into each time. (if that makes sense)

check mine out f you like

http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1070059

sukajamie
02-17-2009, 11:34 AM
ah i get what you mean. maybe i it is meant to be sung or something. or i just discard the repetition so the song is much shorter.