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andrew12398
07-10-2009, 06:38 PM
Finished it.

Tell me what you think? Doesn't need to be a full crit.

sam b
07-10-2009, 06:58 PM
I dont listen to the genre, but it sounds like Metalcore to me :shrug:

The clean intro worked well. The only thing I could suggest (a tiny thing) is add some hammer ons to.. vary it a bit. Like in bar 4 hammer on the 2 3 and 5.

The first distortion riff is good. The harmony works really well and it leads nicely into the next riff at 30.

One thing I will say is I think that riff (at 30) would be better if it went down a key at bar 34. Especially with the drums changing.


Good start, wouldnt mind hearing it finished (if you're going to)

9/10 for what you have so far.


Crit.. either of the bottom two links in my sig? :)

AustinxAtomic
07-10-2009, 07:01 PM
I like the clean part, but once distortion kicks in... it's too metalcore..

andrew12398
07-10-2009, 07:10 PM
I dont listen to the genre, but it sounds like Metalcore to me :shrug:

The clean intro worked well. The only thing I could suggest (a tiny thing) is add some hammer ons to.. vary it a bit. Like in bar 4 hammer on the 2 3 and 5.

The first distortion riff is good. The harmony works really well and it leads nicely into the next riff at 30.

One thing I will say is I think that riff (at 30) would be better if it went down a key at bar 34. Especially with the drums changing.


Good start, wouldnt mind hearing it finished (if you're going to)

9/10 for what you have so far.


Crit.. either of the bottom two links in my sig? :)
Metalcore? I dunno lol.

I like the hammer-on idea.

I'll try the key change and see how I like it.

Yeah I'm gonna finish it eventually, not like I have anything better to do.

I'll crit yours, gimme a minute.

jimmyled
07-11-2009, 05:23 PM
I like the clean part, but once distortion kicks in... it's too metalcore..
Basically this.