Step Up [gp4/5/midi] C4C


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uptheirons95
05-11-2010, 07:47 PM
hi T&C, this a song i recently finished. It still needs lyrics and i'm completely open to outside sources for lyrics (i.e. if you have lyrics that you think would fit, please post them and i'll give you credit on the music/in title). Anyways...... please crit my song and i'll crit your back. thanks guys.

DontPushMongo
05-11-2010, 08:06 PM
Sick!
Very energetic and upbeat, I loved it, coming from a metalhead.

Very, very fun.

misfitsramones
05-11-2010, 09:58 PM
i like it.
the verse was short tho. couldnt fit much in. i wrote something really quick time. its crap lol, but i figure ill post. one mans crap is anothers treasure... lol.
it would be easier if i could say how its sung, what notes are held n what not. but here it is.
a lot is the same, i didnt have much to work with. no offence.

i feel it suffocating my mind
its seporating my sides

and all that i really wanted
to know
was that you were my answer

drag me down to the floor
my body cant handle any more
the strain it puts on
i cant hold on(i cant hold on)

when was it time to let go
a careless feeling left untold

and all that i really wanted
to know
was that you were my answer

drag me down to the floor
my body cant handle any more
the strain it puts on
i cant hold on(i cant hold on)

in the end, its the same as the start
but only now, were further apart.


and all that i really wanted
to know
was that you were my answer

push me further away
every word spoken gone astray
the strain it puts on
i cant hold on(i cant hold on)

kind of a threat signal feel to it. idk why lol.

uptheirons95
05-13-2010, 09:18 PM
this is a more finished version of the song. i added lyrics vocal tracks. C4C still. (I renamed it according to the lyrics).

YesterdaysToday
05-13-2010, 11:16 PM
Hey I really like it man, and theres not much that needs to be changed. One thing I did notice is that the bass is overpowering, and leads are hard to hear. Also the ending kinda surprised me seeing how unique the rest of the song was, maybe throw in some sick guitar/bass fill or something to make it more creative and end better.

Crit the one in my sig?