[WIP] Fjord - a progressive metal song


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dsgn09
05-17-2010, 04:42 PM
Hey guys,

I've been working on this song for a couple days now, and I wanted some outside opinion on it. I was going for an August Burns Red/Veil Of Maya/Faceless sort of feel to it, but it feels like it's missing something.

Like the title says, it's still a work in progress, but any help would be great.

Thanks

http://www.mediafire.com/?tz021zkuhvo

hildesaw
05-17-2010, 04:57 PM
I thought it was pretty decent, definitely a good start. One thing I think would have been cool is if that little lead line starting at 16 should go down a half-step on the next measure. From 5-8 to 4-7. Maybe thats to predictable. I don't know. Also, that very last riff, starting at 63, would have been cooler if the higher part continued through the chugs as it went on. Thats how I would picture it.

Would you like take a listen to one of my new songs? http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1313083

Someone had trouble downloading it, but other people have gotten it, so let me know.

dsgn09
05-19-2010, 09:14 AM
Thanks for the critique. I made a few edits to the first breakdown, and ended up doing the 5-8, 4-7 riff.