Experimental jazzy WIP [GP5]


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aCloudConnected
10-08-2010, 12:56 AM
Work in progress, as you can see. I've been messing around with lydian and such and I've come up with this. I'm trying to transition into a funk rock type thing at the end, but it needs some work.

huevos
10-14-2010, 04:50 PM
Starts out quite promising, but the main portion of the song lacks some punch to it.
You don't need blast beats and powerchord riffage, but there's just no drive.

It's all a big build up that lead nowhere, which was quite a let-down. You did the tension aspect really well, but not enough release (at least for me).

This song is dreamy and enjoyable too, but it just lacked closure and a climax/peak point.

Main reason? I believe it to be the 1st guitar track.

Had you cut that string fluttering alot earlier, and worked towards transition the Mario riff, it woulda been much better.
As it stands right now, the transition is just too jarring.

A good piece that you can really turn around if you work on it.
Just take my suggestions as light advice, doing what you want with the song. Since, it is, ultimately, yours.

C4C?
http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1367316