A Sheep In Wolves Clothing (Metalcore)


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kristjantomasso
03-11-2011, 03:21 PM
Hey guys, here's another song I wrote, let me know what you think!

Erra93
03-12-2011, 10:25 AM
I'm very tired, but one thing I noticed was your harmonies, for example

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E S S S S S S S S E E E
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----------7h-8-------8h-10-8p--7-----||
-----7h-8------8h-10--------------8--||
--0----------------------------------||

When harmonizing that, I would use 10 for 7, 12 for 8, 15 for 10 :)
Like this:

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E S S S S S S S S E E E
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----------10h-12-------12h-15-12p--10-----||
-----10h-12------12h-15--------------12--||
--0----------------------------------||


Try it out and see if you like it :)

Taclite
03-12-2011, 10:50 AM
Get rid of the mediocre breakdowns and you've got a good song.

MattAnderson111
03-15-2011, 09:53 PM
The chord progression in the intro was real good, complimented that riff well.

I really liked those breakdowns, I didn't find them too generic, keep that up.

The chorus+post chorus, made a great pair.

The key change was weird at the bridge, but that might just be me. It works, not one of my favorite parts, but, it works.

The second bridge is amazing when the harmony comes in, my god, that was beautiful.

The only odd thing I observed was you harmonized the 8, on the G string, with a 14. It's a 13 on that particular string.

Overall, it was above average, and I enjoyed the breakdowns, everyone has their own opinion.