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ibanez2420
08-17-2011, 03:17 PM
Hey guys

This is the first song i've written and was wondering if anyone could help me out with it? I fell its pretty standard at the moment and needs some extra bits put in too improve it. I guess its kinda metalcore/hardcore? If anyone could help me out with some ideas it'd be much appreciated and I will c4c :)

Saint78
08-17-2011, 03:40 PM
Pretty cool, it's generic, but as far as generic goes, it's good. I liked what you did with the open C for the first riff, I would really only change the bridge/breakdown part. When you hit the chords on the Low C and G, don't let them ring, if anything make them staccato, it sounds better. Then, the second part of the bridge, instead of the (lead I guess?) first guitar playing, maybe use some synths? Also, a solo might spice it up a bit.


Like this.

Mitsos55
08-17-2011, 03:46 PM
I agree with the above comment. You might also want to repeat meters 19 to 25. :)

ibanez2420
08-17-2011, 03:57 PM
Thanks a lot guys, still learning how guitar pro works and stuff but yeah i'll change it a bit and try make it a little less generic :)