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gdm09
01-15-2006, 10:54 PM
i wrote a song today. i was just wondering if you like it. its in drop d tuning, has about medium distortion, and is at 170 bpm. crit away!

Drop D
170 bpm
Medium Distortion


Intro


|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| (x3) |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|
... ... ... ....... ... ... .


Intro continued


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|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| (x3) |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|


Verse 1

|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| (x3) |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|
... ... ... ....... ... ... .

|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| (x3) |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|
... ... ... ....... ... ... .


Chorus


|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| (x3) |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|


Verse 2


|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| (x3) |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|
... ... ... ....... ... ... .

|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| (x3) |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|
... ... ... ....... ... ... .


Chorus


|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| (x3) |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|


Solo


|----------------------------------| |--------------|
|----------------------------------| |--------------|
|-777-101010-121212-14141414141414-| |-777-101010-7-|
|-xxx-x-x-x--x-x-x--x-x-x-x-x-x-x--| (x3) |-xxx-x-x-x--x-|
|-555-8-8-8--101010-12121212121212-| |-555-8-8-8--5-|
|----------------------------------| |--------------|

|----------------------------------|
|----------------------------------|
|-777-101010-121212-14141414141414-|
|-xxx-x-x-x--x-x-x--x-x-x-x-x-x-x--|
|-555-8-8-8--101010-12121212121212-|
|----------------------------------|

|----------------------------------|
|----------------------------------|
|-777-101010-121212-17171717171717-|
|-xxx-x-x-x--x-x-x--x-x-x-x-x-x-x--|
|-555-8-8-8--101010-15151515151515-|
|----------------------------------|

|----------------------------------|
|----------------------------------|
|-777-101010-121212-14141414141414-|
|-xxx-x-x-x--x-x-x--x-x-x-x-x-x-x--|
|-555-8-8-8--101010-12121212121212-|
|----------------------------------|

|--------------|
|--------------|
|-777-101010-7-|
|-xxx-x-x-x--x-|
|-555-8-8-8--5-|
|--------------|


Chorus


|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|---------------------| |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| (x3) |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| |-000-333-0-|

piratepirate
01-15-2006, 11:25 PM
ummm......really simple?

its basically the same thing over and over again, I wouldn't even go so far as to call it a song. There's no real structure, just some single note lines that become powerchords.

And how do you figure a few octave lines as a solo?

My advice would be to actually make a song out of it...its just the same thing over and over right now, its like you're not taking it in any musical direction.


while you're at it if you could check out mine http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=306282

i'd appreciate that.

NevermorePsalm
01-16-2006, 12:16 AM
Well, as pirate said, its not much of a song. YOu could take it in a The beautiful people direction, and have just a few repeated motifs that groove...but youd have to record it with dynamics so I could see how you did it. Work on it.
Crit mine if you can, the file is in one of my posts, look for it on the first page.
http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=306718

sbikram
01-16-2006, 03:59 AM
I think the repetation of the notes make it boring. Use a little bit of octave patterns and A minor scale to get rid of same notes.

gdm09
01-16-2006, 12:25 PM
yeah, the repetition really bothered me. what could i do to make it better? (and not so repetitive)

gdm09
01-16-2006, 12:31 PM
I think the repetation of the notes make it boring. Use a little bit of octave patterns and A minor scale to get rid of same notes.

how do i use the a minor scale to get rid of the same notes and if you could tell me what that scale is, thatd be awesome. thanks.

VANC3R
01-19-2006, 12:12 PM
a little to easy bud

slipknot_69
01-21-2006, 03:05 AM
Well, yes a bit repetative. Maybe have a second guitar part in there. Maybe space some notes out a bit. something like this...


|-------------|
|-------------|
|-------------|
|--7-7--7-7-7--|
|--7-7--7-7-7--|
|--7-7--7-7-7--|
* * *

les_paul_01
01-21-2006, 03:34 AM
there are heaps of links on UG about the minor scale. unfortunately i cant be bothered finding one now, but it shouldnt be too hard for you.