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I Walk Alone
04-02-2006, 03:28 PM
Asylum

Nothing to gain
other than false love,
Nothing to lose
but our sanity.
Why do we try to feel
This never ending pain?
It's our desire to feel
Again and again...

Chorus: Broken heart,
Stabbed Back,
This is Asylum,
Lose it all,
No turning back,
Enter Asylum.

<Long Solo>

Chorus x2

END IT ALL,
THIS SCREAMING PAIN,
DON'T LET ME FEEL
THIS WAY AGAIN!
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I don't like this one that much, but my other band members do, so I want to know what you think of it.

Edoc'sil_Guitar
04-02-2006, 03:31 PM
That's cool it looks like a part that you could just speak the verses at the end of a song but it doesn't seem to work alone as a song its self.

DeSean
04-02-2006, 04:03 PM
Doens't sound too bad, not really my thing though. It kinda sounds like an emo version of A Perfect Circle, and I like them, so I like suppose I like this!!

Comment on mine please http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=339283

Stolenidentity1
04-02-2006, 07:03 PM
Ummm does it even rhyme cause I cant find it lol......unless u count feel and feel, back and back.

I Walk Alone
04-02-2006, 07:13 PM
Nah it's not supposed to rhyme except for Pain and Again...

NoLeafMetal
05-02-2006, 12:33 PM
San-i-tari-um! Leave me be!

Got a shrewd idea where you got your inspiration.

Wilber
05-02-2006, 01:38 PM
i thought it was good but instead of doing the chorus twice i would do it once more and another verse with different lyrics. it would be a little more interesting, but that's just how i write.

f_ck_it
05-03-2006, 01:57 AM
I liked it alot, id be keen to hear the solo, the solo would make this song. Nice

I Walk Alone
05-05-2006, 10:05 PM
San-i-tari-um! Leave me be!

Got a shrewd idea where you got your inspiration.

Yay someone realized it =D.

Yeah, that's what I got inspired by...

And yeah, I agree that writing another verse and getting rid of a chorus would be better, but I was preparing for a talent show so I didn't have much time. I'll probably edit in another verse though.

And yeah, the solo will make the song =D.

Thanks for the feedback!