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thembones16
04-12-2006, 10:16 PM
There seems to have been a mistake,i copied and pasted#1 synths eniding to mine somehow,i want this to be fair so li made a new #1 synth vs thembones16 thread right here.I apologize for the mistake synth.

#1 SYNTH

The Ballad of the Hammer and Scarf

Reflection fractured, strewn in light,
Refracting sin, constructed by a child?s whim,
To fasten the window to our souls within
The child?s white scarf,
Darkening it with each strike on the glass, starved of brilliance by blood
Watching it seep right through the threads and into a ballad
Echoed across the suburbs, seducing the divine
Into slow autumn decline, into innocence most unfit for human nature.

One swift strike of a hammer,
As a skull cracks on the cul-de-sac, calling for a momentary relapse
But the sound is not shrill enough
As blood pours on the scarf, being synonymous with the cause of the hammer,
And makes life into a sweet ballad to be echoed,
The consequence of windows breaking and skulls rolling to a final solution
Wrapped in signets and sigils, a matching pair for their scarves.

With a perpetual whine of glass on fabrics seducing the divine,
The killer, the meth-head, the sinner,
The poor mans swan song to eradicate life from a broken home?s sorrow,
No one will notice the spidery slits on the windows in the ?marrow,
An opaque veil on a theft based on equality,
Based on the monotony of sin,
Based on the starvation of the brilliance of crimson.
The windows to the soul will be fractured when soothed by a ballad
Weaved in with the carnage and sweet last goodbye.

In a cemetery of over worn shards lodged in the infant?s lullaby
You have to speak so eloquently to be found ?neath the glass tombs,
And so safety will be drowned in sleep while you try to break free of the mirror,
While you try to comfort the infant,
To tell him the mares that he dreams will only be in a pasture,
So near to the ballad?s great echo?s wake of disaster,
But they will prance and sing along with the saccharine lullaby,
While skulls are pressed on the pavement, and the world sleeps so sound,
And even the raped are entranced by the melody of the great hammer and scarf,
As they stagger to claim human life and drain our skulls of blood,
While they fracture the windows to our souls.
But it all comes to naught when they are soothed by the ballad,
And the divine are seduced into slow autumn decline,
Into innocence most unfit for human nature,
Into the hammer and scarf, into the passage of time


THEMBONES16

"The Vile Mystification"

Bathed in my own optical illusions
juggling my misinterpreted confusion
this condition is too much of a circumstance
to corner me in this state of turbulence

underneath it all there lies so much
more than your waiting for,although
you'd still like get yours

A stipulation,your under all these elixirs
a therapeutic treatmeant for your revamping
to get you up and going,for your optical activity

maybe,just maybe id like to think it over

give me a continuance,to determine
what it takes to step through
you

Junny
04-12-2006, 10:24 PM
Oh sorry, I didn't realise it was a genuine mistake. I misunderstood it as being you directly used synth's lines in your song. My bad. I apologise. I'm sorry.

I'm still going with the first which I thought was really well written.

But second was good as well.

Final
04-12-2006, 10:25 PM
First.

#1 synth
04-13-2006, 12:45 AM
s'all good man. trickery is the sincerest form of compliment ;)

ajtfermin
04-17-2006, 11:47 PM
i think the first one's too long.. and too deep.. but i guess people in here actually like it..

the 2nd's a little catchy, though i cant feel the connections within some lines...

i chose the 2nd one ^^;

sponj
04-21-2006, 01:14 PM
^ exactly my thoughts

TimiHendrix33
04-22-2006, 04:39 PM
ms. synthesizer takes te battle.

jallas
04-23-2006, 01:13 PM
one

thembones16
04-25-2006, 10:07 PM
Looks like #1 synth wins unless a splurge of votes come my way,nice job synth ;)

#1 synth
04-25-2006, 10:14 PM
if it means anything, i like yours better :)

edit: yep, i voted for you.

thembones16
04-25-2006, 10:37 PM
Well you modest dog you,but clearly yours was better.