Quick_Axe_Player {Rudolf} vs. Synth {Donnor}


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#1 synth
09-15-2006, 01:29 AM
This is for two points and is the first contest of this new season!!!!!!1

Blind Crackwhores at Dawn

I stand applauding the little square slides on the amphitheater screen
While the various spiral chatter morphs to an uproar:
?Good show lad.?
?Bloody brilliant ideals!?
?He?s a revolutionary revolutionist!?
?This man will bring us into the new millennium!?
?Nothing will stop him!?
?I?d give my life for him!?
?We?d all gives our lives for him!?

Caught up in the moment a journalist quickly pulls
A worn photo out of his trench coat and questions to the world:
?Can I have your autograph??

Suddenly the air grows cold,
Two shots ring from opposite sides of the room
Striking the eyes of the ?picture-taker?
And in somber shock I see the man realize his mistake,
But its far too late, now laying deflated and blind
On the dirt floor, and I implore to the man sitting next to me
Ask with the lowest whisper I can muster:
?Why sir, why must it be this way??
?It doesn?t.? he sharply responds.
?Then why is it??
?Can I tell you a story??
?Yes.?
He unfolds the all-print newspaper dated ?July 28, 2057?
And at the heart lays a color Polaroid.
I loose an unbridled gasp as the uproar starts again,
This time in a different key,
I ask:
?Can I touch it??
?Yes, but only this once.?
?Once is all I?ll get.?
I peered in and I couldn?t believe my eyes,
There was color, beautiful color, looking back at me as if waiting,
And there was nature too, interweaving into a hundred words,
Interweaving a story,
All surrounding a man, a beautiful man,
Sitting under a tree, a golden-green oak,
And he smiles with red lips, looking right at me,
So as to say:
?Live with me and for me,
Die with me in this sunlit shade
In these colors, in this beauty?

And I said to the man:
?I?d give my life for this man?s autograph?
Suddenly the air grows cold,
Two shots ring from opposite sides of the room.
Darkness.
The uproar starts.


Bridge To Your Heart

I remember that day
When I first saw you
A new road was being built
I didn't know where it lead to

After a few weeks the road opened
And I thought I'd go down it
It seemed quite smooth
So I thought travel it more

Soon we became good friends
Walking down that road everyday with you
Suddenly I knew where it was leading
I was walking a bridge to your heart

(Chorus)
Bridge to your heart
It seemed so long of a road
Before I got to the bridge
And you knew that I am really yours

After first stepping on the road
I knew that one it would need to extended
Just like our friendship
So I asked if you would help down that road

We came together, hand in hand
With one common goal
To extend that road
Now you are with me on bridge to your heart

Chorus x2

Quik Axe Player
09-15-2006, 01:53 AM
The song has a name. It is called "Bridge To Your Hear"

#1 synth
09-15-2006, 01:55 AM
k, sry, I wasnt sure, my bad bro *changing* :)

Quik Axe Player
09-15-2006, 02:01 AM
I forgot the t, it's really "heart"

I don't think I gave the title when I pm it to you, lol.

Final
09-15-2006, 04:04 AM
Meh, first.

#1 synth
09-17-2006, 11:07 AM
I realize their both not excellent but we kinda need some more votes...

DanteR*
09-17-2006, 11:32 AM
Red

Retribution
09-17-2006, 11:45 AM
Is it wrong to vote for someone solely because you know the other 1. can write better. 2. 'knows better'(if you know what I mean)?

#1 synth
09-17-2006, 12:12 PM
^meh, do whatever you want. truth be told, I just randomly pulled this piece out of a notebook, no revision or anything, and it was a weak piece to begin with...

However I will say that the goal of a 1vs.1 is to be voting on which piece you prefer to the other, not the personal aspects of any subjective thoughts you have towards the people in it {though it will definitely come up}

Jammydude44
09-17-2006, 02:46 PM
Red. I'd agree with you that it's not your best though, synthy.

Retribution
09-19-2006, 08:33 PM
Meh, red. I enjoy it enough.

s0nofabe4ch
09-19-2006, 08:45 PM
The Red Baron strikes again.

LaLaLaLoopy
09-24-2006, 09:57 AM
BULL****, I thought this was about lyrics, music and melody. I think synth is on the wrong site.You want to write (clearly you should) poems and sonnets thats great cuz I do like your piece but if its truly lyrics to a song than where can I hear it.
And who picks which song go's against which song, atleast try and get simular styles,reading these two "songs" clearly one is a better read than the other even though one doesnt read like a song at all.
Anyway thats what was on my mind, Ill chk back latr to see if anyone responds.

DanteR*
09-24-2006, 12:30 PM
^ Read the Rules you can post any type of piece you want. Synth doesn't normally post songs anyways. You can't judge the pieces on music and melody dumbass, it's just words. you can judge on rhyming though... yeah, the pieces aren't very similar, but meh...

LaLaLaLoopy
09-26-2006, 08:57 AM
Dumbass? screw you BCH...pretty brave at the keyboard.My band would knock your lame azz off the stage into the fifth row.........and #1 synth,like I said before...I like your writing.

Final
09-26-2006, 09:29 AM
Dumbass? screw you BCH...pretty brave at the keyboard.My band would knock your lame azz off the stage into the fifth row.........and #1 synth,like I said before...I like your writing.

"Biography:
I love music,just starting to learn to play the guitar"

Hmm, if you're the guitarist in your "band", then I'm pretty sure you're not telling the complete truth.:rolleyes:

Get yo' lame azz out of dis forum, yo.

No, really though, grow up kid.

BULL****, I thought this was about lyrics, music and melody. I think synth is on the wrong site.You want to write (clearly you should) poems and sonnets thats great cuz I do like your piece but if its truly lyrics to a song than where can I hear it.
And who picks which song go's against which song, atleast try and get simular styles,reading these two "songs" clearly one is a better read than the other even though one doesnt read like a song at all.
Anyway thats what was on my mind, Ill chk back latr to see if anyone responds.

I think you're on the wrong site. You're right about this being about lyrics, but this forum has nothing to do with the music or melody that accompanies those words. Go to the Original Recordings forum for that. You want to know who chooses which song goes against which song? Both people do. There's a thread in this forum where you can ask others to do a one on one competition against you. After it's all set up, you choose your piece and send it to your opponent, who chooses their own piece. Then the actual one vs one thread is created. Each writer here has their own individual style when it comes to writing, so when people pair up for these their styles are almost always completely different.. well, maybe not almost always, but most of the time. Anywho, moving on.. you can put anything to music. Anything you write can be considered to be a form of lyrical content.

So, like I said, don't act all tough and say things like "pretty brave at the keyboard", because that makes you look like a douchebag. You douchebag.:rolleyes:

LaLaLaLoopy
09-26-2006, 01:26 PM
O k ......first off I never said I was the guitarist,I ve only been playing for a few months,my guitarist is the guy teaching me cuz were trying to get a larger sound. Im no kid,pretty sure Im older than you. As for writing "brave at the keyboard" I find it funny being called dumbass and douchebag here on a website when I KNOW face to face you'd be ****tin your panties.......However...I do appreciate you explaining how this one on one thing works,perhaps you and I can go at it sometime?......now be a good little BCH and go unload my trailer.

Final
09-26-2006, 07:26 PM
That's cool if you're older than me, but you surely don't act like it. I find it funny you think I wouldn't call you a douchebag in real life, because I probably would. So really now, let's not spam this thread anymore and let's leave it to die, okay? That'd be swell.

Oh, I do apologize for explaining it like an asshole, but I'm glad I at least helped explain it a bit. Maybe we can do a one on one sometime later.

Quik Axe Player
09-27-2006, 09:55 AM
Back to the topic if anyone is going to post anymore.