Four Line Competition Group 2


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10-14-2006, 05:01 PM
Let the Games Begin!! Please Vote!!

Herded are the Sheep

Hexed words strike eternal ears
A manifestation of internal fears
The shackles of time forcing us to flock
While those on the throne begin to mock

Down by MacDougal-- You flitting your eyes at me, sparks dancing out through the humid air and
Erupts into neon-bright fire flies, splashes the pavement and burns like the bridge between us
And I stand less straightly
Cause I bent myself backwards to cover this gap between you and me

The boy made of stone
with tears like diamonds
rain from the sky
and cleanse a broken youth

The Cab Rider

Down in the slums, around the burgers and their buns;
The Cab Rider; omnipresent and still.
Streaking the pavement
Merciless at will.

10-14-2006, 07:18 PM
Bump for Group 2

10-14-2006, 07:31 PM
go red!

#1 synth
10-14-2006, 07:55 PM
by process of elimination I gotta go with red.

Alk 3 addict
10-14-2006, 11:08 PM
Red was the best... but I didn't like the "and" at the end of the first line...

10-15-2006, 04:15 AM
Wasn't red five lines......?

10-15-2006, 05:53 AM
^ It's four, it wouldn't fit on the screen...


10-15-2006, 07:16 PM
I'll have to go with Blue

10-18-2006, 11:11 AM
^ It's four, it wouldn't fit on the screen...

Oooh, 4 lines on MS Word?

10-18-2006, 11:40 AM
Notpad :) I said I would judge by each one what I considered acceptable as a line, it just about made it :p


10-18-2006, 11:53 AM
^ What's notepad? Ah well :p:

10-18-2006, 05:13 PM
not for nothing, i did specifically say when i sent the piece in that if "down by MacDougal" counted as a line to cut it off, because i was aware that people would bitch. so no crying.

10-19-2006, 12:28 PM
I'm not bitching... i don't mind mate. :)