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The Hurt Within
12-06-2006, 01:00 PM
You've seen kill bill...1 and hopefully not 2 ever ever ever again. But have seen its Mortal Combat cousin. You've read about cleopatra, you've hopefully also not seen WWE and you've probably pelted bottled-piss at a certain member of Avenged Sevenfold.

But now is your chance to bring this wrath upon fellow S+L members...
*legal disclaimer* - Only those accepting of such vengeance cannot sue for emotional distress and or death.

DUE DATE: 6th Jan 2007!

If you dont know what any of these mean, then look them up. And you can only choose from those in this list.

Reverb Poem
- Contains 4 stanzas, the first two makes a statement on the required theme/topic, the last two oppose said statement, like a debate.

Shakespearean Sonnet - (inc. Iambic Pentameter, with rhyme)
- 14 lines written in Iambic, must have a 'Jump' in tone within the piece, following the rhyme scheme ABABCDCDEFEFGG.

FreeForm - (No rhyme, no meter, no structure)
- Obvious

Blank Verse - (with Iambic Pentameter, No rhyme)
- With strict Iambic meter, but without rhyme.

Mirror Loop
- A piece that reads from start to end, then from end to startFind example here (http://home.vicnet.net.au/~poems/ps/html/mirror_loop.html).

Epistle
- Written in the style of a letter, addressing the recipiant, and then finishing by indroducing yourself, very formal.

Acrostic - (Beginning and end of lines)
- Obvious

Shape Poem
- A piece of poetry that's shape reflects the theme

Dorsimbra
- Stanza One: Four lines of Shakespearean sonnet (iambic pentameter rhymed abab). Stanza Two: Four lines of short and snappy free verse.
Stanza Three: Four lines of iambic pentameter blank verse, where the last line repeats the first line of Stanza One.

Sestina - (although 4 stanzas is acceptable)
- fixed pattern of end-words which demands that the end-words of each line in each stanza be the same, though arranged in a different sequence each time.

Terza Rima - (Strict Rhyme Scheme)
- follows the rhyme scheme ABA BCB C (2 stanzas required)

Ode - (See the explanation in the Lyrics Tips thread under Sonnets)


sacrifices

1. Victims name: - The_Hurt_Within
Selected Structure(s): - Blank Verse (Inc. Iambic Pentameter, No rhyme) + Shape Poem
Topic/theme: - The Assasination of Archduke Franz Ferdinand of Austria



2. Victim: Jamie
Structures: Reverb poem + Terza Rima
Topic: The wars, conflicts, war lords and barons of Somalia


3. Victim: Caz
Structure: Mirror Loop
Topic: the duodenum, written in the first person.


4. Victim: Jay
Structure: Blank Verse Sestina
Theme: A day in the life at a nursing home....complete with bed pans and sores, walkers, wrinkles, Depends, and ohh, that lovely smell.



5. Victim - Carpy
Structure - Dersimbra
Theme: From the girl's point of view, feelings of dejection and betrayal when your boyfriend broke up with you because he caught you cheating.


6. Victim - Teghvir
Structure - Mirror loop
Theme: The dimensions as detailed in the string theory, from one to ten


7. Victim : Piro
Structures : Acrostic (front and end of lines) + Reverb poem
Theme : Ballet dancing


8. Victim:CIRC
Stucture: sonnet
Theme: Wedding toast to two lesbians who have just married


9. Victim: Stratkat
Structure: Dorsimbra
Theme: Why fantasy is a worthless genre of writing and the importance of the real world.


10. Victim: SilenceEvolves
Structure: Epistolary/Acrostic
Theme: The Fact that all Finnish Poetry begins and ends with the word "kjśrlighet."



11. Victim: Dylan
Structure: Sonnet
Theme: Scientology

Jammydude44
12-06-2006, 01:05 PM
Pscht. You're in and you know the restricitions, sneaky :D

I'm in, this sounds incredibely exciting, you're quite the promoter :)

Jamie

The Hurt Within
12-06-2006, 01:09 PM
haha, yes, yes I am. It matters not that I know the restrictions, put it that way.

caz_guitar_dude
12-06-2006, 01:13 PM
I'll give it a go. But i reserve the right to pull out :p:

Phoebus
12-06-2006, 02:44 PM
i'm in

streetcarp19
12-06-2006, 02:59 PM
Ahh yes, i'm afraid, but in....

punchupatatigge
12-06-2006, 04:40 PM
in.

Piro Gonzalez
12-06-2006, 07:32 PM
In.

Edit: PIRO-Piro?

circular.parade
12-06-2006, 07:34 PM
sounds exciting :p. I'm in. I'll send you acrostic piece tonight probably btw.

stratkat
12-06-2006, 07:43 PM
in
STRAT-Kyle

:angry: :grrr: :angry:

SilenceEvolves
12-06-2006, 09:54 PM
oh hell yeah i hate you guys so in

The Hurt Within
12-06-2006, 11:49 PM
Corey after your no show in the winter comp, and based on the fact you have shy on 24 hours to turn in a piece for the Alphabet comp, I'm gonna wait and see how you do with that before I let you in.

guitarsuperman2
12-07-2006, 11:45 AM
hmm, im in....kinda sounds scary... i like it! :)

SilenceEvolves
12-07-2006, 04:10 PM
bastard. :p:

The Hurt Within
12-07-2006, 08:56 PM
But I made you submit a piece for the Alphabet comp, so now I have 9. Cheers.

Oh and you're in.

The Hurt Within
12-10-2006, 10:28 PM
com'on one more FOOL!

Jut2K6
12-10-2006, 10:37 PM
I'm having a hard time writing lately. Seems like I could use the practice. I'll be in but don't be brutal is the lyrics are sub par.

The Hurt Within
12-10-2006, 10:47 PM
Then I suggest you dont enter this comp, I am more than willing to let you but its gonna involve alot of restrictions, requirements and knowledge of the language. Its just a recommendation.

Jut2K6
12-10-2006, 10:49 PM
I'll take your recomendation then.

SilenceEvolves
12-10-2006, 10:50 PM
if the english language was a *****, i'd be her pimp.

The Hurt Within
12-10-2006, 10:52 PM
Well then this will be amusing, I'll pass that on to whoever is below you, give them a recommendation. :D

Jut2K6
12-10-2006, 10:55 PM
Heh the restrictions kind of scare me away. I'm not sure how I can write with restrictions.

circular.parade
12-10-2006, 11:46 PM
That is starting to scare me. :D

The Hurt Within
12-10-2006, 11:58 PM
UPDATE #1

Listed in the opening post is a series of structures, this is the first of three restrictions that you will have to adhere to when writing your pieces.

Have a nice day.

#1 synth
12-10-2006, 11:59 PM
Can I be in? I hate everyone involved if that helps... :p:

edit: nvm then :sad:

unless I still can be?

The Hurt Within
12-11-2006, 12:00 AM
Yeah I have one space left....haha oh this made me smile.

#1 synth
12-11-2006, 12:01 AM
Wait. So all the forms restrict us!? Shit.

circular.parade
12-11-2006, 12:01 AM
do we have to call one? to pick one? will we be assigned one?

The Hurt Within
12-11-2006, 12:04 AM
You'll see. I just wanna see if its possible to add any more structures to the list before I reveal the next two, and tell you all how this is gonna work.

P.S. No dylan, not all. :D

#1 synth
12-11-2006, 12:14 AM
Consider my PM sent. :)

TrigFunction
12-11-2006, 12:19 AM
So can anybody rant on anyone? haha id be interested in what people would write on me, so if someone wants. go ahead.

The Hurt Within
12-11-2006, 12:36 AM
Its not like that, although gd idea.

The Hurt Within
12-11-2006, 01:10 AM
UPDATE #2

Okay heres how this comp is gonna work:

Look at the list of sacrifices, and see who is below you. These people are going to be choosing every restriction on your piece. First of all they choose either one or two of the available structures from the list. Those structures highlighted red count as a double restriction, so only one can be chosen. Those highlighted in blue are slightly easier than red, thus meaning you can choose two from the list of blues.

Secondly the same person will then choose the topic of the above persons piece, I've left this open so as to bring the personal touch. I dont want choices like "porn" or "pooh" okay, it has to be something like "war" or if you want to be extra mean say "WW2" or "D-DAY." Give them a picture, or a verse from the bible, a film whatever. :D

If you're not familar with the work of the person above you, go read some of their work, see how they write, and on what; then give them the exact opposite, the more restrictions you can inflict on your opponant the better your chances are.

So check the list carefully, and when you have chosen the restrictions for your victim post it here in this format, I can't stress this enough, this is the easiest way for me.

E.g

Victims name: - Jammydude44
Selected Structure(s): - Mirror Loop
Topic/theme: - The ursa-minor constellation

And post any pictures etc. If required.


Any questions?

circular.parade
12-11-2006, 01:41 AM
hahaha I love you so much

Victim : Piro
Structures : Acrostic at end of lines + Reverb poem
Theme : Ballet dancing

However, steve, you might want to explain some of the structures from the list, as some of them aren't even on wikipedia. Even then, some people might not be too familiar with them.

SilenceEvolves
12-11-2006, 10:37 AM
Awesome. Good thing I vary my structures and topics so often, bitches.

I wish I could inflict wrath on somebody I'm more familiar with though. Can I PM recommendations to users who have people I know? Can for example, Jammy, tell whoever is above him, not that I know who it is, that he has to write a poem using only stressed syllables?

Pleaaaaaaase.

#1 synth
12-11-2006, 10:45 AM
Does that mean I do you Steve? :)

The Hurt Within
12-11-2006, 11:41 AM
No Dylan you do Corey, I do you :D and papa smurf can jack off to the tape afterwards.

And Corey yes do so if you wish, this is meant to be the vengeance comp after all...

SilenceEvolves
12-11-2006, 11:51 AM
Are we allowed to use different structural forms than you mentioned? Could I say for example that my person has to write something using only one syllable (aka all stressed syllables) words?

Also in an unrelated note, since I'm already asking questions, am I allowed to post my college entrance essay in S+L? I just got devastated by being turned down by my number one school and now I need to apply elsewhere. I'm desperate.

The Hurt Within
12-11-2006, 11:55 AM
Yeah sure corey, put at the top that any spam, or derogatory posts will result in a warning and/or ban from me.

As for the other structures I'd rather keep it to the list, cause I've gotta go over these to check they comply, and if its out of what I know then it could be unfair.

caz_guitar_dude
12-11-2006, 12:26 PM
Ok.

Victim: Phoebus
Structures: Reverb poem + Shape poem
Theme: Chinese politics


Oh yes, what an evil bastard i am. Sorry Jay. ;)

SilenceEvolves
12-11-2006, 12:30 PM
Your definition of a sonnet is wrong, unless you mean Shakespearean sonnet. And if you do, does that mean Italian sonnets are unacceptable?

Phoebus
12-11-2006, 01:35 PM
Ok.

Victim: Phoebus
Structures: Reverb poem + Shape poem
Theme: Chinese politics


Oh yes, what an evil bastard i am. Sorry Jay. ;)


you're forgetting that i was raised by the Ming dynasty

nevermind i lied, that was Reaganomics.

i'm screwed


also-- who do i now screw?

caz_guitar_dude
12-11-2006, 01:45 PM
you're forgetting that i was raised by the Ming dynasty

nevermind i lied, that was Reaganomics.

i'm screwed


also-- who do i now screw?
:p:

That would be BJ; have fun!

The Hurt Within
12-11-2006, 01:51 PM
Wait wait Calum you're choosing for Jammy, you choose for the one above you...read the update again, I said "see those below you. They will be choosing your...."

:/

Jay gets off :D

The Hurt Within
12-11-2006, 01:52 PM
Your definition of a sonnet is wrong, unless you mean Shakespearean sonnet. And if you do, does that mean Italian sonnets are unacceptable?


Well okay, Shakespearean sonnets only, just for ease.

caz_guitar_dude
12-11-2006, 02:30 PM
Wait wait Calum you're choosing for Jammy, you choose for the one above you...read the update again, I said "see those below you. They will be choosing your...."

:/

Jay gets off :D
Oh! Even better then, i know Jamie's writing. ;)

I'll register my new victim's fate after footy tonight :p:

Phoebus
12-11-2006, 03:06 PM
friggin sweet

SilenceEvolves
12-11-2006, 03:46 PM
Victim: Guit
Structure: Dorsimbra
Theme: Why fantasy is a worthless genre of writing and the importance of the real world.

Jammydude44
12-11-2006, 05:36 PM
Victims name: - The_Hurt_Within
Selected Structure(s): - Blank Verse (Inc. Iambic Pentameter, No rhyme) + Shape Poem
Topic/theme: - The Assasination of Archduke Franz Ferdinand of Austria

A Major Turning Point in History, I think you'll agree.

Best. Comp. Ever.

And I know Caz is going to ruin me...

:D

Jamie

caz_guitar_dude
12-11-2006, 05:51 PM
Victim: Jamie
Structures: Reverb poem + Terza Rima
Topic: The wars, conflicts, war lords and barons of Somalia

Good luck my friend. :)

Edit: There, it's changed. However i thought it was two blues in the first place... :confused:

Jammydude44
12-11-2006, 05:56 PM
Ah Caz read the second update :D

Reds count as two, either 2 blues or one red restriction :D

Jamie

caz_guitar_dude
12-11-2006, 06:18 PM
Whoops! Take 3. I'll edit my original post.

punchupatatigge
12-11-2006, 06:27 PM
Victim - Carpy
Structure - Dersimbra
Theme - How sad you are after breaking up with your boyfriend (from a girl's point of view) because he wouldn't let you watch Gray's Anatomy because the Jets game was on.

Just kidding.
EDIT: Actual: From the girl's point of view, feelings of dejection and betrayal when your boyfriend broke up with you because he caught you cheating.

TrigFunction
12-11-2006, 07:05 PM
i have no idea whats going on 0.o

stratkat
12-11-2006, 07:07 PM
Read the update on page 2.

SilenceEvolves
12-11-2006, 07:22 PM
Read the update on page 2.

psst... strat...

that's too easy. make him write... a serious patriotic piece on southern america in sonnet form with end line alliteration.

he's canadian. it'd be hilarious.

The Hurt Within
12-11-2006, 07:24 PM
Victim:CIRC
Structure:Sonnet
Theme:Night time (As anything to do with night, ex. stars, sounds, nocturnal animals, etc.)


Ahhh thats too easy.

stratkat
12-11-2006, 07:26 PM
I knew it was easy, everything I could think of was easy, or to hard to explain, I rather like Silences idea, okay I'll come up with something better.


okay how about this:

Victim:CIRC
Stucture: sonnet
Theme: Wedding toast to two lesbians who have just married. :p:

circular.parade
12-11-2006, 07:32 PM
psst... strat...

that's too easy. make him write... a serious patriotic piece on southern america in sonnet form with end line alliteration.

he's canadian. it'd be hilarious.


Pfff, even worst, I'm a quebecker.

Southerners, the stereotypical ones, aren't pretty popular up here. Politically, I mean. Expect a pretty ironical piece from me if you ask me about that ;).

Oh, and to whoever has it. Don't make Corey write about Landon's mom using the word "toboggan", he already done it and got out of it pretty well :p:



Edit : haha, strat, quite like this. I'm gonna have a hard time with the sonnet, but hey

SilenceEvolves
12-11-2006, 07:39 PM
Pfff, even worst, I'm a quebecker.

Southerners, the stereotypical ones, aren't pretty popular up here. Politically, I mean. Expect a pretty ironical piece from me if you ask me about that ;).

Oh, and to whoever has it. Don't make Corey write about Landon's mom using the word "toboggan", he already done it and got out of it pretty well :p:

lol.

i wish i still had that. i only vaguely remember it, but i think it was rather good.

that's much better though strat :p:

Piro Gonzalez
12-11-2006, 08:23 PM
Oh my.

Victim - Teghvir
Structure - Mirror loop
Theme: The dimensions as detailed in the string theory, from one to ten.

http://www.tenthdimension.com/flash2.php

I'd watch all ten.

punchupatatigge
12-11-2006, 08:51 PM
Now its mirror loop? jesus. -_-

That was an intriguing video.

The Hurt Within
12-11-2006, 09:08 PM
Can I actually contest my chosen structures, mainly cause its impossible to write a shape poem about an event, it has to be a material object. Unless I...hmm well whatever, I'll do it in the shape of austria or something. nvm.

streetcarp19
12-11-2006, 09:46 PM
Person getting ****ed: Jay
How he's getting ****ed: Sestina
Theme of the ****ing: A day in the life at a nursing home....complete with bed pans and sores, walkers, wrinkles, Depends, and ohh, that lovely smell.

TrigFunction
12-11-2006, 09:53 PM
psst... strat...

that's too easy. make him write... a serious patriotic piece on southern america in sonnet form with end line alliteration.

he's canadian. it'd be hilarious.

whoever said i was canadian?

#1 synth
12-11-2006, 10:05 PM
Corey: Corey
Corey Corey Corey: Epistolary Acrostic
Corey Corey Corey Corey: The Fact that all Finnish Poetry begins and ends with the word "kjśrlighet.

SilenceEvolves
12-11-2006, 10:26 PM
i don't think that's true... do you have a link or something explaining it? google came up empty.

#1 synth
12-11-2006, 10:42 PM
Cause it's norweigan :)

http://ets.freetranslation.com/

Jammydude44
12-12-2006, 01:19 PM
Can I actually contest my chosen structures, mainly cause its impossible to write a shape poem about an event, it has to be a material object. Unless I...hmm well whatever, I'll do it in the shape of austria or something. nvm.

More than happy to change it if you wish?

Jamie

The Hurt Within
12-12-2006, 01:28 PM
^^ Naaa dont worry, I've just gotta be original here.

caz_guitar_dude
12-12-2006, 03:06 PM
Be careful if you're doing it in the rough shape of Austria though Steve. Remember that at that time it was the Austro-Hungarian Empire and not just Austria, and therefore their empire was considerably larger and of a different shape.

History lessons FTW! :p:

stratkat
12-12-2006, 04:57 PM
If the person below us fails to show up, we'll be assigned our structure and theme, right?

Phoebus
12-12-2006, 06:31 PM
Victim: Caz
Structure: Mirror Loop Shakespearean Sonnet
Topic: the duodenum, written in the first person.

caz_guitar_dude
12-12-2006, 06:42 PM
Nice try, but it's either 1 red or 2 blue. ;)

I would be truly screwed though if i had to do that. :(

Phoebus
12-13-2006, 12:09 AM
oh come on! shakespearean sonnets aren't hard!
fine.

make it.... a mirror loop


thats lame. a mirror loop shakespearean sonnet woulda impressed the pants offa me

caz_guitar_dude
12-13-2006, 03:38 AM
:p:

Rules are rules!

stratkat
12-13-2006, 11:42 AM
I think you might have missed it, so I'm reposting it.

Victim:CIRC
Stucture: sonnet
Theme: Wedding toast to two lesbians who have just married

streetcarp19
12-13-2006, 12:33 PM
Yeah, i think you missed mine too:

Person getting ****ed: Jay
How he's getting ****ed: Blank Verse Sestina
Theme of the ****ing: A day in the life at a nursing home....complete with bed pans and sores, walkers, wrinkles, Depends, and ohh, that lovely smell.

#1 synth
12-13-2006, 03:29 PM
Stevie, post mine pwease :)

stratkat
12-14-2006, 07:07 PM
Synth and I are the only ones who don't have are restriction (at least I think it may just be me) so if Guit doesn't give me any restrictions will they be assigned to me?

The Hurt Within
12-14-2006, 07:23 PM
Yes ^ And dylan I will I'm just slowing this down a bit so I can have a New Year deadline, I thought it would take longer.

The Hurt Within
12-17-2006, 07:13 PM
12. Victim: Dylan
Structure: Sonnet
Theme: Scientology

#1 synth
12-17-2006, 10:02 PM
k, wish me luck. :)

guitarsuperman2
12-18-2006, 01:49 PM
sorry cant be in, got christmas to do...sorry bout holdin up.

The Hurt Within
12-18-2006, 02:10 PM
^ No problem man, Kyle I've just flat out removed Guitar, so you take his chosen topics instead. Enjoy :D.

Jammydude44
12-18-2006, 03:00 PM
Do we have a due date ?

The Hurt Within
12-18-2006, 03:03 PM
Yeha why not...since xmas and all. DUE DATE = 2nd JAN

Jammydude44
12-18-2006, 03:04 PM
Tassssstttttyyyyyyy.

The Hurt Within
12-30-2006, 01:25 AM
I'm extending the due date on this, I'm away for the days it needs to be in, so its the only way. I'm gonna make the due date - Sat 6th of January.

peACE

stratkat
12-30-2006, 01:28 AM
Yay, I'm really having a bit of trouble with mine, but I'll get it done. (i hope)

#1 synth
12-30-2006, 01:56 AM
thank you sweet Jesus.

The Hurt Within
12-30-2006, 04:30 PM
thank you sweet Jesus.

Anytime young padwan.

:wtf:

The Hurt Within
01-05-2007, 01:22 PM
You have until midnight tomorrow night to get these in, so far I have....ummm 3!

caz_guitar_dude
01-05-2007, 01:50 PM
You're joking.... argh, i really don't have any time! I got to remember this monologue that i wrote; i have to perform it on monday!

The Hurt Within
01-05-2007, 01:52 PM
I'm gonna run a second comp similar to this soon, so catch that one man. Its no problem. :D

caz_guitar_dude
01-05-2007, 01:59 PM
Ah brilliant! :p:

SilenceEvolves
01-05-2007, 03:46 PM
lol i still haven't found anything substantial on why kjaerlighet is used in all finnish poetry or even if it is. all i know is that it either means air, love, affection or devotion.

holla.

The Hurt Within
01-05-2007, 04:02 PM
Then go for a stanza, each from a persons pov on the above. One thinking why all the poems should end with love...and so on. /shrugs.

SilenceEvolves
01-05-2007, 05:41 PM
i've already started it, i'm just letting everyone know i'm bsing lol. thanks for the advice, i kinda like that idea.

#1 synth
01-05-2007, 09:53 PM
Steve, there is no way i can complete this in such a short amount of time (one day) and so i regret to inform you that i cannot participate in this competition. If this is not okay then please tell me and I will try my best to BS my way through it... but it will be crap...

Piro Gonzalez
01-05-2007, 10:27 PM
Steve, there is no way i can complete this in such a short amount of time (one day) and so i regret to inform you that i cannot participate in this competition. If this is not okay then please tell me and I will try my best to BS my way through it... but it will be crap...

I was just about to post this for myself. Apologies.

The Hurt Within
01-06-2007, 07:59 AM
Fair enough...and I was looking forward to your piece Dylan...write me it anyway...no deadline. Just to see y'know.

15 hours remain. That is a split in times for USA and England. (Around midnight)

#1 synth
01-06-2007, 01:00 PM
k, I'll write it anyway.

Thanks and sorry for the inconveinience :(

The Hurt Within
01-07-2007, 07:11 AM
^ its no trouble man at least you took the effort to reply.

Points deducted go to;

Jay
BJ
Teg
Mathieu

This makes me :sad: I dont want to!

streetcarp19
01-07-2007, 01:08 PM
Na, I deserve it....didn't get it in on time and am sorry steve for the inconveinience. I hope there is some way of making it up to you without having to pleasure you sexually again... :p:

Piro Gonzalez
01-07-2007, 01:25 PM
I should have -1 as well.

circular.parade
01-07-2007, 02:42 PM
Yeh sorry steve, definitely...

Holiday season + long delays = sucky writers that don't submit pieces.



poo-poo.

The Hurt Within
01-07-2007, 02:44 PM
I should have -1 as well.

You gave me warning you weren't in. So I'm not gonna. It seems harsh I know.


^ Its okay guys I hate doing it, but cant make exceptions. Its all gravy :D

But BJ....:sad:

streetcarp19
01-07-2007, 03:21 PM
But BJ....:sad:Yeah steve, it is a shame, and if my parents would have had internet connection at their house while I was visiting, i would have more than likely got it in. I hope your hatred for me currently is only temporary.

The Hurt Within
01-07-2007, 07:18 PM
I cant hate you, I only hate one person and thats my Uncle.