my first start of a metal song check it

[Xx_Defiance_xX]

hi i wrote this my self its just a small peice of a song im starting, so tell me if its good or not thanks..im writing one measure at a time also.its one of my first song parts..ill be adding more later...

(play 4 times) (/ slide)
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-0000000000-3333333333-6666666666-2222222222

(also play 4x times)

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-00-4/3-00-3/2-------------------------

(play 4 times also)

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------4/3------3/2------------------------
-0000-4/3-0000-3/2-------------------

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haha hey man keep it up, you'll get better, im pretty sure the first riff has been used before but whatever lol

[Xx_Defiance_xX]

yea kinda hard not to find a new rifff....but it sounds cool lol

[Xx_Defiance_xX]

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