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The Hurt Within
01-01-2007, 06:29 AM
I'm Bleeding Heartache (And You're the Mistake)

I'm bleeding heartache
like I'm the mistake
she says I am
Is she blaming me
for what she did?
I don't understand
how can she yell at me
when she deserves it

She's the worst thing
that ever happened to me
yet she still brings
me falling to my knees
every thought of her
makes it harder to breathe
and she's never far from my thoughts




Sailing in Caravelles

Pound by pound
this feint rain is worth its weight in gold.
For nothing decieves a sunset more
than a feigned silver-lining.
Windowsills doused with droughts
become places of rest.
As if a rose in a deluge,
is a flower dipped in dew to others.
Theres something ground-breaking
in watching rain fall,
when its you they're all aiming for.
So be the first,
or the last,
to stare a mass metaphoric murderer
in the face.
I, however, remain
open eyed, as a mark or respect.
As if to say; "I see where you're coming from."

But I said in reply; "I can't see for the rain,
pouring through my shattered window panes."
For I am the last to see,
this is the second storm of the century.

The Hurt Within
01-01-2007, 06:34 AM
This is a 1v1 mate, a poetry 1v1 there is no genre.....

And if you think everything sounds emo, you probably are.

rustic_metal
01-01-2007, 06:42 AM
ohh...poetry...soz mate

The Hurt Within
01-01-2007, 06:43 AM
red

rustic_metal
01-01-2007, 06:46 AM
red

hmmm...i went blue...

Final
01-01-2007, 06:50 AM
Blue steals my breath and heart away.;)

The Hurt Within
01-01-2007, 06:51 AM
hmmm...i went blue...

Its courtesy, as blue is mine.

FrenchyFungus
01-01-2007, 07:25 AM
Blue, if only for knowing the difference between your and you're

:p:

Alk 3 addict
01-01-2007, 12:15 PM
Blue.

Retribution
01-01-2007, 01:07 PM
Steve, I'm disappointed in you for doing this, but blue regardless.

I know there's no rules about who you challenge, but...

paper_hearts
01-01-2007, 02:09 PM
Damn You're, I had it right when I made the thread, just so everyone knows I know the difference, it's just that apparently I don't know the difference at 3 in the morning.

BLUE:)

AccidentsHappen
01-01-2007, 02:26 PM
blue ftw. Nice job to both of you though, it was close.

#1 synth
01-01-2007, 02:53 PM
Blue because Steve is hawt... and it was an amazing piece... but mostly the first one.

.Sidewinder.
01-03-2007, 08:54 AM
Blue.

I'm sorry, Red just doesn't do it for me. Too standard, in my opinion.

aksuperstar
01-05-2007, 04:02 AM
Theres something ground-breaking
in watching rain fall,
when its you they're all aiming for.

^that part in blue is pretty cool. I vote for blue overall, like what has been said before, while red isn't bad, it's pretty standard and for a lack of a better word mundane.

The Hurt Within
01-24-2007, 07:08 AM
Good match, I'm sorry it seemed unfair, I never really looked into his writing, nor knew what piece he'd use.

So anyway gd match.

paper_hearts
01-24-2007, 09:22 AM
Thanks, and don't worry about it, I'd read your stuff and knew what I was getting into, now I have a better idea of how I compare to the veteran writers of S&L:).