Generation ne(X)t

[EvilWeevil]

C4C please...!



Generation ne(X)t

We, are the ones you can't ignore,
The ones you see outside your door
The ones you always beat down,
You can't forget us, our time is now.

Hope ends now and you can't see,
How little your life really means to me
Conflict is over, death to the powers
Your struggle is pointless, not ours

Out with the old and in with the new
Unable to stop us, blind, deaf and dumb too
The irony is that you raised us this way
Chemical crap and TV all f**king day

No wonder we f**ked up, wound up too tight
The towns full of drugs, drunks and fights
The product of boredom and broken homes
The ward soon fills up with broken bones

No future in sight, just live off the dole
Smoke too much dope and end up in a hole
Dug in a church yard, six foot deep
The only real place where you can truly sleep

Poverty, strife and all for what?
You think we're docile, controlled, we're not
We'll beat you senseless and leave you to die
Feel nothing at all, whilst all you do is cry

Desensitised youth on the march for your life
Pissed out their minds and armed with a knife
Fear us you fool, for we surely will come
If you thought that was bad? wait till we're done

[michal23]

For some reason, likely due to the flawless flow and the AABB rhyme scheme, i can picture this as some sort of political rap. I hope this does not offend you! But I love the words you chose and used, and it's not so mainstream and typical, but one can see the thought behind it. This is a good song, and if you added a chorus, I think it would go well on the radio. I can't really think of many bad points right now, but maybe try to switch round and edit the rhyme scheme in certain parts - it gets slightly monotonous after a while.

But overall i like it and I think is a sound song for an album - possibly even a single. Songtitle sucks however =P: you might wanna change it, I certainly dislike it.

C4C?

http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=691701

Michal

[EvilWeevil]

actually i was more inspired by artists like Lamb of God, whose verse structure seems (imo) to rely on couplets. Although I am a massive RATM fan as well, so perhaps not surprising...Yeah, title only an idea, something to work from (usually how I do it)

[thayes93]

Cool, I like this line best
"The irony is that you raised us this way
Chemical crap and TV all f**king day"

Because they did.

[Kivarenn82]

yup it definitely reminded me of RATM. not that i listen to them very much, but the few tunes i've heard it reminds me them for sure.

**** you i won't do what you tell me!

[TriggerFinger]

Not a big fan of the aabb ryhme but you pulled it of nicely here.
You have some strong lines that are worded very well, and are backed up by plenty of meaning.
Not to huge on the topic either, but it seemed to work ok and you dindn't beat the dead horse. Kept it origninal.
Not a bad read at all.
Cheers.