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03-26-2008, 12:44 AM
I finished my first song.

That's not my official bass lines, I just got bored and filled them in, and then let a friend mess with them.

Please don't be harsh :(

reaper_x
03-26-2008, 03:55 AM
Sounds a Tad like Blink 182.
It was OKAY. Not Bad.
I enjoyed bars 47 - 50.
The rest needs work.

It has much potential.

Ziggums
03-26-2008, 10:51 AM
I'll crit it if you export to Midi?

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03-26-2008, 08:47 PM
Sounds a Tad like Blink 182.
It was OKAY. Not Bad.
I enjoyed bars 47 - 50.
The rest needs work.

It has much potential.
Blink 182? o_o

I never even listen to them. I wanted it to be more progressive, not alternative... oh please no :|

Just tell me what to work on. I'm willing to listen. Thanks.

envoykrawkwar7
03-26-2008, 10:08 PM
everything after 47 and that first opening riff was great
the bit inbetween, im not so much a fan of
this was interesting, it was like progresive meets pop-ish
there is a key tool, so that you dont have to put text in as to where the key changes
the writing was good, the outcome however didnt seem so great, might just be some bad planning, which if you go back through and listen as if it werent your own song you would know exactly what is wrong, overall though, nothing seemed too bad, just to many repeat bars
in summary
9/10
great for a first song, pretty good job overall
just keep at it

c4c? link in my sig

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03-27-2008, 05:23 PM
I'm just wondering, what do you hear "poppy" in that song? and yes,the verses repeat too much. I think I'll bring em down to 2 times, and not to repeat 4

thanks a lot guys. I appreciate the help :D