Another attempt at a song (Metalcore) [GP5, GP4, MIDI]

[Moose45]

Well here another attempt at making a song, I'm still not any good at transitions.


Not Finished

EDIT: oh yeah C4C

[lionslicer9999]

I liked it all. But bar 16 just doesn't fit there at all.

[Moose45]

^ You want a crit?

and bar 16 is meant to have a scream in there...of some sort.

[lionslicer9999]

^ You want a crit?

I don't care, songs are down there vvv if you want to crit, go ahead it's all welcome.

[henkka_potku]

It's a good song. Too short, make it longer for better crit. The riffs are good, nothing to complain. The rhythm guitar at bars 11-15? well about there the rhythm guitar doesn't fit very well. As I said make it longer for better crit :) good choice in tuning though, drops are good at metal.

C4C? "Melodeath" in my profile :) it doesn't have drums, because I am not able to make them.

[Moose45]

^ Thanks I just critted your song. You are an amazing guitar player.

[Kardot]

Hmm,those chords complementing the lead line from the beginning of verse 1 don't seem to fit. Other than that,I liked the intro,very groovy. The chorus was okay.

Keep working on it,there's some potencial there. :p: