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Jarusafes
09-01-2008, 10:07 PM
Just the beginning of a song im writing. Tell me how you like it and if i should keep going with it. Thanks :)

Regression
09-02-2008, 04:26 AM
Take away the triplet D's, and replace them with 2 quavers then crotchet. The triplet just makes the rhythm lose it's flow, and seems like you are just trying to make it flashy when it isn't.

As a whole, it's okay, far to repetitive. I have pieces with 4 times the ammount of ideas, but are shorter. If you add in vocals it might make a difference, but there is no apparent chorus.

78 onwards is cool, add in drums and bass, there is some things which need changing, a few off notes. It could sound cool though, just play around with it.

Jarusafes
09-02-2008, 07:14 AM
Thanks a bunch for your comment. But what do you mean by replace them with 2 quavers, then crotchet?

Regression
09-06-2008, 04:53 AM
Yes, take away the triplet sign pretty much, and change the minim to a crotchet.

Edit: Seriously, 220 beats per minute? This is definately 110, it'd make everything so much easier to write.

Julz127
09-06-2008, 04:58 AM
thats really good, sounds like it could be a tool song.