Just finished recording this song for an EP. It's hard, it's fast, and it's a teensy bit heavy. You get a cookie if you can guess what it's about :D
I'm not here for conversation
I'm not here for second thoughts
I'm just here to push my fist and face
Right through the f***ing wall
You might need to hold me back
(You might need to hold me down)
'Cause I can't control myself
When there's those f***ing pigs around
My life is red and bold
We are expendible
We push on through
We can be three
And we will set our children free
I'll rip you apart
(I'll rip you apart)
'Til there's nothing left but your heart
Burning cold like a solar eclipse
Still not here for conversation
Never had those second thoughts
But I'm still bent on breaking
Everything that I can come across
It's almost like there's no volition
Like I don't own my own thoughts
Like I'm just some nameless NPC
A game upon the shelf
Turn back from headlong crisis
You know I'll burn my best
I'll be the judge
And I'll be jury
I'll be the f***ing wings of death!
And I'll be your rocket ship
And I'll set you high among the stars
Feel free to stick a link in any comments and I'll crit away!
Although there are some lines that could use changing up a little bit to maybe help it flow a little better, I think it expresses the anger about the current state of things in London pretty damn well (I'm guessing it's got something to do with the recent riots?). Overall though, I loved it.
I usually pick out my favorite verse in my crits, and it was a little harder this time cause there's a lot going on here, but I like this one most, I think the lines "I'll be the judge and I'll be the jury, I'll be the ****ing wings of death!" are great, just really great.
So we uploaded this song online, and you can listen to it here.
There are swears though, so be warned.
Thanks for the crits Ali, I think that one's also my favourite line.
First, thanks for critting mine. Second, I like the aggression of this piece and with a few minor alterations I think it could make a fine metal/hard rock song. Good luck!
SOme good stuff man....I can't crit at the moment to save my life....(no sleep and a shity day)....but..you have the coolest avatar ever....just thought i should post to tell you....
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