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SilverDolphin 08-08-2012 04:38 PM

Petrichor(instrumental experimental..something) C4C
 
I had a rush of creativity today while messing with sounds on my yamaha keyboard and composed this, "Petrichor", piece that reflects how I feel when it rains.
But now I'm stuck and I don't know how to improve this. What do you guys think? And in what genre is it considered in?
I played all the instruments on my keyboard except the chimes, so please excuse my terrible playing :S
http://soundcloud.com/lost-in-energ...r-test-complete
Thanks and enjoy! C4C of course.

EpiExplorer 08-08-2012 04:44 PM


SilverDolphin 08-08-2012 05:06 PM

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Originally Posted by EpiExplorer

I don't get it..?

aaron aardvark 08-08-2012 10:02 PM

SilverDolphin,
The keyboard sounds are nice (especially the bell-like sounds). Playing could have been a little tighter, but not bad. If you have a sequencer, you could clean up the timing a bit. I liked it overall, it is pleasant. Nice melodies. Please review my music at this link:

http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1553531

Joshua1207 08-09-2012 03:49 PM

The beginning right away reminds me of a couple of songs from Fang Island's new album. If it weren't for the violins (I think) this would remind me of a song from Clannad too. As it is this is a very pretty song, but I think it could use more of a climax near the middle-end. Could be great for some BGM

jdenmo 08-09-2012 04:31 PM

its quite motivational. sounds like something you'd see at the end of a race in a kids movie where there celebrating victory or learning morals or some shit. if that makes sense ahah, very peaceful, would be great for background music in a movie with that positive tone.

c4c? http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1555072

CerebralEdge 08-09-2012 11:35 PM

That was interesting track. I really dug the melody at the end; it almost reminded me of one of those old school music boxes with the rotating pins.

Definitely had an uplifting feel to it, but would benefit from some percussion for sure. Are there drum sounds on your synth?

Keep working on it, perhaps try consolidating it down to only the best sections and fleshing them out more.

SilverDolphin 08-10-2012 05:56 AM

Thanks for the comments!
Most of the melodies were improvised. I composed this to be background music with the intention of not adding percussion or guitar, but trying out new sound possibilities.

Mephaphil 08-10-2012 08:29 AM

I like it!

It could have been tighter in places, but the arrangement really complimented the different layers you had going on.

I'll be listening to your other stuff :)

Xnulian Rrudho 08-10-2012 10:15 AM

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Originally Posted by EpiExplorer


I don't think that's enough to merit a C4C, personally...

Xnulian Rrudho 08-10-2012 10:22 AM

The bass note or cello-ish note in the third chord of your opening sequence doesn't work, for me. Couldn't get any more technical about it, off the top of my head...maybe the bass needs to be an octave lower or something? Other than that it's a nice intro.

Big fan of the second section. I think it loses its way structurally a bit when it fades away to just the chimes for a few seconds; sometimes an unexpected move in a song is great, but that sounded more to me like something you'd done for lack of other ideas about where to take it. The outro was nice again though!

It feels like something Trent Reznor might have put on NIN's Ghosts 1-36 album, at the moment; i.e. it has the beginnings of something very memorable, but hasn't quite got there yet. Thing is, he released that as an album, whereas you can still work on this one! So basically if I were you I'd look to build on some of the good ideas in it and make it more coherent. Good start though.

C4C? http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1555199

SilverDolphin 08-10-2012 10:23 AM

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Originally Posted by Xnulian Rrudho
I don't think that's enough to merit a C4C, personally...

I know. The band's name is Petrychor. So what? I'm considering reporting that post.

Xnulian Rrudho 08-10-2012 10:30 AM

Wouldn't bother tbf, if he/she posts proper comments then they'll get crits or helpful replies themselves, if not they won't! As it is I guess it's just a harmless bump for your thread :)

SilverDolphin 08-10-2012 10:34 AM

Xnulian Rrudho, thanks for the comment!
The third note audible is actually the minor 6th of the actual bass note that unfortunately isn't very audible. That's why it sounds off.
This piece isn't really complete yet. The fade off to chimes was because of a tempo change. I'm still trying to figure out where to take this piece. That's why I posted it! I love UG :)


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