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ali.guitarkid7 09-15-2012 06:46 PM

WotW - Fumes and God
 
A censer scents an empty alleyway

its musk in the shadow of gasoline

burning the air to some degree


mercury runs free on the walls

like the muathins' voices embracing

the fifty-something-old edifice

but never together, always


a second


apart


There is no peace in the East,

only the censer and the adhan:

a song of fumes and God.

culex-knight 09-18-2012 06:29 PM

Grats, solid peace. But, I have never seen them called the "muathin" before. Nor, can I find info on the use of that word. Thought it was the Muadhin. Care to elaborate?

ali.guitarkid7 09-18-2012 06:36 PM

Thanks, and it just depends on the accent. Technically where I'm from, it's pronounced 'Muazin' but I went with the more formal pronunciation.

EDIT: Actually ignore that part, that's wrong :p:

#1 synth 09-18-2012 07:05 PM

congrats man :cheers:

ali.guitarkid7 09-18-2012 07:07 PM

Thank you :cheers: I'm glad I finally got one of these :o

cubs 09-26-2012 08:47 PM

graaaats

longtian006 10-25-2012 11:02 PM

I'll return to this, but I'll say that I didn't like this that much, mostly because I think it's all over the place. Later tonight I'll try to properly critique this.










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ali.guitarkid7 10-26-2012 10:00 PM

Did an adbot just call my piece 'all over the place'?


My foot shall make contact with yr arse swiftly and with such brute force that your merchandise will implode due to the sheer pressure.

oh and *reported*

vintage x metal 11-07-2012 01:02 PM

keep it up!


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