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diseasedtrees 11-11-2012 08:15 PM

Penumbra
 
Just lyrics for an acoustic song my band wrote. Any type of criticism would be greatly appreciated. I'll be more than happy to c4c. Thanks for your time!

Who tied the strings that pulled us all taut?
we're bound together in a sunspot
yelling outside, climbing in trees
we build ourselves tall but collapse with ease
come this winter come this winter there’ll be one less
untie the knot, he knows what’s best

and we can light up
this penumbra

right the wrongs left right from old friends
the strongest of wills give into amends
come this winter, come this winter we’ll fall asleep
I’ll wake you all if you awaken me

and we can light up
this penumbra

GregMurray7 11-12-2012 08:35 AM

Better than most things in the songwriting forum man. I like the first two lines especially.


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