UG Community @ Ultimate-Guitar.Com

UG Community @ Ultimate-Guitar.Com (http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/index.php)
-   Songwriting & Lyrics Techniques (http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?f=69)
-   -   Need help with a chorus. (http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1573670)

Rudolphthegreg 11-18-2012 08:12 PM

Need help with a chorus.
 
So I wrote this chorus but I need another paragraph between "Asking rhetoric all through the night" and "If we call out for help now" and I was wondering if you guys had any ideas.

Are we begging for answers,
Or begging for change?
Are we lost and alone
Do we sleep through our days
And return to our bedrooms
And stare at the light
Asking rhetoric all through the night.

If we call out for help now
Would anyone mind?
And the yes would explain why
I only drink when I drive.

abasu89 11-19-2012 08:07 AM

Nice lyrics. I'd like to help but before I do, may I ask what is your source of inspiration for these lyrics? I feel like these lyrics could mean different things to different people, but if I know where you're coming from, it would be put me in a better position to help you.


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 11:14 AM.

Powered by: vBulletin Version 3.0.9
Copyright ©2000 - 2014, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.