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Eccer 02-28-2013 02:13 AM

Heralds Of The Night
Heralds Of The Night

Today's a new scent
For the wolf pack
To ride on
Heralds of the night
Their songs upon
The crescent moon
In the wake

A fury, comes an
Aftermath in their tongue
News spread fast
On naked ears
Ever so

As cracks open
A mass swelling
Now comes their
True nature
In a form of
Ritualistics & campfires
Dancing mad men
And late nights

The caravans haunted
Of baying beasts before
Crossing riverbeds tossing
Plague ridden bodies
And further

"Take the
Remnants on stakes
For the eyes
To witness
A cruelty for justice
Fear, for the people"
Do not believe them

Mark a new scent
For the wolf pack
To ride on
Heralds of the night
Their songs upon
The crescent moon
In the wake
Of the wild

doubtfulsalmon 03-03-2013 10:31 AM

as always your flow of ideas is very good, and the imagery is obviously well thought out. i really like how you use line breaks and repetition to establish a rhythm throughout, which also gives the piece more of a traditional feel.

however i found that the lack of punctuation made this quite difficult and daunting to read, so i've had to go over it quite a few times to fully appreciate it. i appreciate how it can be an effective technique, but personally i don't think it works so well in longer pieces.

the final stanza concludes this brilliantly btw :)

Eccer 03-06-2013 10:14 AM

Hm interesting. I have always been taught not to use punctuation, especially when I want to establish flow in lyrics. But I will consider it next time I write something.

Thanks for having a look ;)

Battery Chicken 03-07-2013 01:30 AM

Hangover 3 Theme song

Eccer 03-07-2013 07:00 AM


Thanks for sharing your view on this. It's really helpful....

Invicto91 03-07-2013 03:16 PM

Originally Posted by Battery Chicken
Hangover 3 Theme song

aaannnnd /thread, haha. But in all seriousness, that was pretty good, a hell of a lot better than anything i have attempted.

Jordan89R 03-08-2013 09:11 PM

I enjoyed reading this. Word choice is great in my opinion, and it really gives off a cool vibe. May I ask what you were envisioning when you wrote this? Or where the inspiration came from? Thanks.

Eccer 03-08-2013 10:47 PM

The inspiration came out from nowhere. I felt like playing with the language, and I had some good lines circling in my head. So I wrote them down at once, and afterwards edited it. 'Twas fun!

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