|The Hurt Within
||06-16-2007 01:09 PM
WOTM - May - Questionnaires.
So once again after a hard fought battle we have two winners. Carmel and Nick.
Real Name: Nick
Location: Salem, WI
Favourite Bands: Brand New, Elliott Smith, The Shins, Neutral Milk Hotel, Say Anything, I Hate Myself, Sunny Day Real Estate, Bright Eyes, Built to Spill, Thursday + Whatever
And band we should listen to is: I Hate Myself
Most Inspirational Writer (Lyrically): Elliott Smith is a big influence on how I try to write, and what I write about.
Favourite poet/poem (published writer): Robert Frost is my favorite poet, and Salinger has been a big influence for me recently.
If you could be any writer ever, who would you be: Probably Robert Frost.
Why Do You Write: It helps relieve stress.
Anything special you do while you write: I turn off whatever music I'm listening to.
Favourite technique/style: Simplicity is cool.
Favourite Writer on UG: I've enjoyed pieces from all of the good writers at some point or another.
Most Helpful Critter (thus known as critic): Carmel. She's very honest about your writing and doesn't try to be nice about it, which makes it all the better if she tells you something is good. She also has a knack for reviving pieces that I'd rather she didn't. :p:
Your Most Recent Work and Reason behind It: The piece that is probably the main reason I'm filling out this questionnaire (found here ) was inspired by Carmel's sig. I usually take inspiration from everything. There's so many stunning things all around me, that no one ever mentions, and I need to tell someone about it.
Tips for Newer Writers: Write down everything. Every single thought that goes through your head. I have a Word document that's at least 15 pages long, just filled with every verse, stanza, or whatever that's come to my head. Most importantly, keep writing and apply the advice you get from people here. Swallow your pride and accept your flaws. I was dreadful when I started posting here, and while I still wouldn't consider myself among the best writers on this site, I'm filling this out, so I've obviously gotten better.
Any Final Comments or Thoughts: Thanks so much to everyone who voted for me, or even just read one of my pieces. It means a lot to be able to share all the stuff in my head with you guys, the fact that you consider it good is just a bonus. Thanks a lot to everyone.
There it it is. Thanks. :wavey:
Real Name: Carmel
Location: Tel Aviv, Israel
Favourite Bands: Cake, Calexico, James, Pink Floyd, The Shins and Israeli artists you’ve never heard of.
And band we should listen to is: Eran Zur, if you could only understand him.
Here is a rough translation by me. Remember that Hebrew grammar is different and may cause sentences that seem to have illogical syntax.
On The Eve of Bet Kislev
(Kislev is a Jewish month and Bet stands for “2” in Hebrew, as it is the second letter of the alphabet. In short, it’s a date. 2 in Judaism is a number associated with misfortune and disaster.)
On the eve of Bet Kislev
I devoured my soul,
I left my home
In front of the sea,
Put a stone in my pocket,
Tied up ropes,
Went into the sea
And fought the waves.
My soul begged for mercy
In the depth of turbulences
But I am dreaming,
I am inside a dream;
And in the dream - a quiet lake,
And in the dream - a lake
With goldfish swimming.
My day of disaster is my day of joy
And my day of joy is my day of disaster.
Blind in the heart of the sea,
Who will save him?
My soul begged for mercy
But I am dreaming.
My soul has tumbled down
To the seventh pit
And took its place
In the woods of misery.
Soul devourers hold their own -
They turn here into trees,
Reside between the branches.
Coarse, when I call, was my throat,
Glued down was my tongue
And dizzy was my heart
From the strength of my pain.
Buried – not in the desert
But in my house, my castle -
Perhaps a depth-teller
Will tell the depth of wisdom in my eyes,
For my day of joy – my disaster
And my day of disaster – my joy.
Most Inspirational Writer (Lyrically): See above.
Favourite poet/poem (published writer): From olden times, John Donne. More modern pick would be Yehuda Amichai, an Israeli poet – you can find some of his translated poetry here - http://www.ithl.org.il/amichai/poems.html
If you could be any writer ever, who would you be: Would it be to pretentious to just be me?
Why Do You Write: Cause the page is right there and a blank page needs filling.
Anything special you do while you are writing: it differs.
Favourite technique/style: rhyming schemes of sorts, mainly internal and also mostly free verse.
Favourite Writer on UG: Well naturally Steve (The Hurt Within), especially when I see the process of his writing and get the full meaning of his pieces. Also Matt (Something_Vague) has had some of my favorite pieces ever and Jay (Phoebus) is always writing pieces I extremely enjoy. Also I must say Nick (NGD1313) has had wonderful pieces lately.
Most Helpful Critter (thus known as critic): Jamie (Jammydude) is always helpful and bassbeat77 (Don’t know your name, sorry) is incredible really.
Your Most Recent Work and Reason behind It: Black Sea Spring I didn’t really explain it in the piece but Black Sea Spring is actually a guy I served with in the military. His name translated from Hebrew is “Spring Black Sea”, and I recently remembered the time I used to know him and how I was back then. That’s what the piece is about.
Tips for Newer Writers: Listen, you may get a whole new view on your piece/writing, which you never thought of.
Any Final Comments or Thoughts: hmm... think I got it covered.