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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-31-2010, 08:36 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 351
Posted By LandingLight
Cheers for the crit man, appreciated. However, I...

Cheers for the crit man, appreciated. However, I wouldn't consider this a love song- if anything, it's quite the opposite. It's about finally coming to realise that what you once believed was "love"...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-31-2010, 09:25 AM
Replies: 0
Views: 185
Posted By LandingLight
And She Becomes The Sky

This one is a bit of a continuation of my last one, Mira, hence the similar themes/tones. As usual, this is just a first draft, so any criticism is appreciated. I realise the title is perhaps a bit...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-31-2010, 07:51 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 154
Posted By LandingLight
Personally I usually have back catalogues of...

Personally I usually have back catalogues of lyrics that never really get used, I tend to be more lyrically prolific than musically. Usually when I write a piece of music I like to "live with it" a...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-31-2010, 07:13 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 228
Posted By LandingLight
"maybe wings are on your fingers and your...

"maybe wings are on your fingers
and your strings are made of gold
but you really make me wonder
what's a man without a soul?"

This is really good, I like it- especially the first two lines. I...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-31-2010, 07:07 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 310
Posted By LandingLight
I didn't get the Adam and Eve references (then...

I didn't get the Adam and Eve references (then again, I am not religious myself, so it may have gone above me) but the content was excellent. I really enjoy reading your work, it's got a certain...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-31-2010, 07:04 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 205
Posted By LandingLight
"Trying anxiously to wrap my head Around a...

"Trying anxiously to wrap my head
Around a matter trivial and worthless
Desperate for perspective, but
Clarity comes with reflection"

So true, excellently put. I really like this, so much that I...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-31-2010, 06:59 AM
Replies: 17
Views: 468
Posted By LandingLight
Nice one liner :) LL

Nice one liner :)

LL
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-31-2010, 06:57 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 328
Posted By LandingLight
Not the biggest punk fan myself, so I'm probably...

Not the biggest punk fan myself, so I'm probably not a very good judge of this particular piece. The verses are short and to the point, which goes hand in hand with the genre, good job. I'm not sure...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-28-2010, 09:01 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 351
Posted By LandingLight
Cheers for the crit, will take them on board for...

Cheers for the crit, will take them on board for the second draft! Any pieces of your own you would like me to have a look at? Just post a link!

Cheers again,

LL
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-27-2010, 05:47 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 1,314
Posted By LandingLight
"The printer's broke again And there's no...

"The printer's broke again
And there's no coffee left
Now the boss is calling for you"

Nothing worse than this!!! I feel your pain.

I really enjoyed this, you've clearly put a lot of thought into...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-27-2010, 05:40 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 544
Posted By LandingLight
I'd keep the opening, it's quite punchy mate and...

I'd keep the opening, it's quite punchy mate and one of the strongest parts in my humble opinion. My personnal preference would be to omit "babe" and "man" from it, but without hearing it in the...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-27-2010, 05:32 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 351
Posted By LandingLight
Mira

This is new, a first draft to be exact. It still needs some tuning but this is the basic idea :)

LL


Mira


You burst into a million pieces of sky,
As I fall in love with all your beautiful lies.
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-23-2010, 08:19 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 333
Posted By LandingLight
Very dark, but I like dark material myself....

Very dark, but I like dark material myself. Perhaps a bit more focus on the structure? That should make it flow a bit better I think.

On a side note... I read "with semen covered bandanas" as "with...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-23-2010, 08:17 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 545
Posted By LandingLight
This is excellent, very good imagery- especially...

This is excellent, very good imagery- especially all the sweet references. I'm picking up some Tori Amos/Kate Bush in this (which is a sincere compliment). Only suggestion I have would maybe to emit...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-23-2010, 08:10 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 239
Posted By LandingLight
Although I can't really relate to the subject...

Although I can't really relate to the subject matter much myself, I think the repetition is put to very good use in this case. I like it. Good job :)
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-23-2010, 08:06 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 409
Posted By LandingLight
I quite like this actually, especially the last...

I quite like this actually, especially the last couple of lines. Perhaps make it a bit longer to flesh it out? And yeah, picking up a Linkin Park-ish vibe too :)
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-23-2010, 08:04 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 357
Posted By LandingLight
Cheers guys, believe it or not this one does not...

Cheers guys, believe it or not this one does not actually have music to it (yet) on account of it being relatively new.. I like to live with a piece of music for a while before assigning lyrics to...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-19-2010, 07:37 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 357
Posted By LandingLight
In Sepia

Hey guys,

I have been lurking here quite a while but only just registered then. Read a lot of good stuff on this forum and figured I'd like to contribute if at all possible. Most of the stuff I...
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