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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
02-28-2009, 04:08 PM
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Replies: 2
Views: 178
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grevhead221
The Greatest Love
This is a poem that i wrote for an english project. For the project we're supposed to write an autobiography as a person from Shakespearean times. Either someone who lived during his time or one of... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-13-2008, 12:46 AM
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Replies: 5
Views: 259
Posted By
grevhead221
I didn't like the first stanza. I think you...
I didn't like the first stanza. I think you should try to express your anger in a way other than swearing. i liked the second part. i thought it was very well written and very raw. the last... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-12-2008, 11:44 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 106
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grevhead221
This was really good. A little depressing, but...
This was really good. A little depressing, but really good. I liked everything about this. Very nicely done. I didn't really find any errors. Great job. Keep up the good work. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-12-2008, 06:52 PM
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Replies: 2
Views: 159
Posted By
grevhead221
It was pretty good. Only thing i didn't like...
It was pretty good. Only thing i didn't like were the last two lines of the chorus. I don't like that repetition. Other than that i thought it was really good. I, too, would like to hear the... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-12-2008, 01:18 AM
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Replies: 10
Views: 423
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grevhead221
Nah, its just nice guys that she knows. Most of...
Nah, its just nice guys that she knows. Most of them are gay that she knows from the school play. And i wasn't saying that to be mean, i'm friends with those guys too, that's just not how it is. ... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-12-2008, 01:01 AM
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Replies: 10
Views: 423
Posted By
grevhead221
For Her
The girl i like sits behind me in math. She told me to write her a poem cause she's seen some of my other stuff and wanted me to write something for her. So i'm pouring my heart out. Please rip it... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-11-2008, 05:54 PM
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Replies: 33
Views: 992
Posted By
grevhead221
Since when do high schools have...
Since when do high schools have playgrounds? Anyway, when i first looked at it i was like "F*ck. This is wayy too long, i'll read the first couple stanzas, give a ****ty critique, and be done with... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-10-2008, 03:38 AM
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Replies: 5
Views: 160
Posted By
grevhead221
Thanks, but no thanks. I'd rather just know what...
Thanks, but no thanks. I'd rather just know what you thought of the lyrics. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-10-2008, 03:18 AM
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Replies: 5
Views: 160
Posted By
grevhead221
Every Day
It's been a while since i've posted anything in here. I thank the American Educational System for that. Anyway, i wrote this for and about one of my ex's, who, at the moment, i am unsure of my... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-30-2008, 05:19 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 201
Posted By
grevhead221
Wow. Well done. It was very well written. I...
Wow. Well done. It was very well written. I loved the imagery and it flowed really nicely. I honestly found no flaws to report. Great job. Crit... |
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Forum: Electric Guitar
09-30-2008, 05:15 PM
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Replies: 113
Views: 2,547
Posted By
grevhead221
lol first of all, it would make him 14 or 15 lol....
lol first of all, it would make him 14 or 15 lol. Second of all, GTA is not a bad game for a kid his age to be playing, i mean i've been playing rated M games since i was 11, and i've never been in... |
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Forum: Electric Guitar
09-30-2008, 04:47 PM
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Replies: 10
Views: 281
Posted By
grevhead221
I don't rest my hand either with my Floyd Rose. ...
I don't rest my hand either with my Floyd Rose. For palm muting, i do it as close to the end of the strings as possible, it gives it a great sound and keeps lots of sustain. |
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Forum: Electric Guitar
09-30-2008, 04:47 PM
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Replies: 10
Views: 281
Posted By
grevhead221
I don't rest my hand either with my Floyd Rose. ...
I don't rest my hand either with my Floyd Rose. For palm muting, i do it as close to the end of the strings as possible, it gives it a great sound and keeps lots of sustain. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-30-2008, 04:33 PM
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Replies: 2
Views: 214
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grevhead221
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Forum: Electric Guitar
09-30-2008, 03:35 PM
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Replies: 15
Views: 396
Posted By
grevhead221
RR3 Rhoads or KVX10?
So I've been looking around recently for a new guitar, cause my Ibanez RG120 just isn't cutting it anymore for the style of metal we play. I've decided that i'm going to go for a Jackson V, but... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-27-2008, 12:49 AM
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Replies: 2
Views: 198
Posted By
grevhead221
I didn't really like this one too much. I did...
I didn't really like this one too much. I did like the first verse, but the rest of it seemed really chliche. That's just my opinion. It did have nice flow and rhythem, but the clicheness really... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-27-2008, 12:33 AM
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Replies: 2
Views: 214
Posted By
grevhead221
You Wounded Soal (or something along those lines)
We now have two vocalists in my band, me (vocals/guitar) and just a vocalist who plays no instrument. I sing and scream, and our other guy mainly screams. So the verses mainly feature him, and the... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-20-2008, 05:41 PM
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Replies: 10
Views: 292
Posted By
grevhead221
I really enjoyed this. I really liked the...
I really enjoyed this. I really liked the imagery and metaphor, and how it wasn't too hard to understand what you're trying to say. It was extremely well written. Its also a very easy song to... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-20-2008, 05:24 PM
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Replies: 2
Views: 167
Posted By
grevhead221
I really liked this a lot. It was extremely well...
I really liked this a lot. It was extremely well written. Lots of imagery and metaphor. It really worked great. The only problem i have was that the first stanza didn't flow particularly well. ... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-20-2008, 05:12 PM
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Replies: 19
Views: 508
Posted By
grevhead221
Overall i'd give this song a D minus. It was...
Overall i'd give this song a D minus. It was very cliche, very vague, and the flow was iffy in some parts. I honestly saw no originality whatsoever in this song. It could use a lot of work. But... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-20-2008, 04:48 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 254
Posted By
grevhead221
An Unconscious Pain
Well, every metal band has to have at least one really hardcore song on their album. This is that song. The verses are sung while the chorus is screamed. That's really all i have to say about this... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-23-2008, 03:58 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 258
Posted By
grevhead221
First of all... definately keep this hardcore. ...
First of all... definately keep this hardcore. It's really good for hardcore. Or do both. A lot of bands do that. They'll make one version and then put an acoustic version out as like a bonus... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-23-2008, 03:14 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 441
Posted By
grevhead221
I thought this was an extremely well written...
I thought this was an extremely well written piece. Yes, the flow was iffy in some places, but not horrible. I am actually at a loss of words right now, but it was a very good poem. Just work on... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-23-2008, 03:07 PM
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Replies: 0
Views: 110
Posted By
grevhead221
Chaos
I wrote this at like 1:30am so it won't be perfect, but i just had a lot of thoughts running around in my head and i wanted to get them down on paper. This song is acoustic, kinda gives the listener... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-17-2008, 01:15 AM
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Replies: 5
Views: 266
Posted By
grevhead221
Eh, it was alright. Yes, you should delete those...
Eh, it was alright. Yes, you should delete those last two lines, not very good. Good concept though. I don't know, this just didn't really do it for me. I didn't find anything really wrong with... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-17-2008, 12:52 AM
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Replies: 4
Views: 172
Posted By
grevhead221
That was really good. I really liked it a lot. ...
That was really good. I really liked it a lot. Heh, it took me a minute to get it, but once i did, i really liked it. Great imagery and it flowed really nicely. I honestly found like no flaws. ... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-13-2008, 03:43 PM
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Replies: 7
Views: 300
Posted By
grevhead221
I really liked this a lot. Its very well written...
I really liked this a lot. Its very well written and the imagery is very good. I like how you describe your feelings in the first stanza and explain why you're feeling them in the second stanza. ... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-13-2008, 03:25 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 235
Posted By
grevhead221
A Very Sorry End
There's not much i can say to lead up to this song except that i had to say sorry. Everything in parenthasis is screamed, unless noted otherwise. Its a heavier song, cause our band has decided to... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
07-16-2008, 11:08 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 211
Posted By
grevhead221
i thought it was pretty good. I liked the imagery...
i thought it was pretty good. I liked the imagery and it was put together quite nicely (if that's a word). Thx for critting mine. Just to make a clarification about the chorus incase you were... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
07-13-2008, 09:47 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 161
Posted By
grevhead221
My Little Flower
Yea, I know it's a stupid title. It's all I could come up with. Anyway, this is a song about and for my girlfriend, i was originally gonna write a love song, but A.) I suck at writing love songs... |
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