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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-29-2012, 07:15 PM
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Replies: 1,662
Views: 50,094
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I'm a sucker for The Emperor of Ice-Cream, though...
I'm a sucker for The Emperor of Ice-Cream, though that's not really that long. Probably T S Eliot's The Wasteland |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-10-2012, 08:02 PM
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Replies: 1,662
Views: 50,094
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^It's certainly got much more blood, violence,...
^It's certainly got much more blood, violence, death and sex. The New Testament is way too up itself. Give me "I'll flood the Earth and kill everyone" God over "it's OK, just kill my son and I'll... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-10-2012, 08:26 AM
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Replies: 12
Views: 517
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kdownes
If I had to be honest, I think I preferred this...
If I had to be honest, I think I preferred this one. The first felt over cluttered and un-organised. A product of the emotions and times, I'm sure, but the message and meaning here is so much more... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-10-2012, 12:18 AM
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Replies: 12
Views: 517
Posted By
kdownes
Is this a follow on from Coma? It feels very...
Is this a follow on from Coma? It feels very thematically similar. There's a honesty and rawness to both of these that's made it difficult to truly offer a critique. I feel like they mean something... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-10-2012, 12:16 AM
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Replies: 5
Views: 283
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kdownes
Thanks for all the feedback, guys. I'll get...
Thanks for all the feedback, guys. I'll get around to leaving my thoughts on yours. And yes, Andre, this was a lot of fun to write. Which was a nice change. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-07-2012, 09:46 AM
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Replies: 1
Views: 181
Posted By
kdownes
The "ist/iss" rhyming scheme got a...
The "ist/iss" rhyming scheme got a little tiring by the end. Thematically, it works, I guess, but I can't help but wonder if there were some better word choices. Or even mix it up with two or three... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-05-2012, 10:15 PM
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Replies: 17
Views: 741
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kdownes
There's a lot going on here. I keep discovering...
There's a lot going on here. I keep discovering new things every read. Maybe I'm looking too much into it, maybe it's really simple, but to me it's an onion, and I'm loving unwrapping the layers. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-05-2012, 10:14 PM
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Replies: 8
Views: 279
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kdownes
Somehow you always make the most simple, basic...
Somehow you always make the most simple, basic things seem deep, and rich and interesting. Your work is definitive proof that less is nearly always more. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-05-2012, 08:33 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 283
Posted By
kdownes
Can You Hear Me, Major Tom?
i'm doing science and i'm still alive Yeah, I’ve done this before But now I know a little more; A little wiser, a little longer in the hair Around the waist a little wider. And time has been a... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-04-2012, 10:09 PM
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Replies: 6
Views: 389
Posted By
kdownes
Congratulations for taking a cliched, overused...
Congratulations for taking a cliched, overused topic and managing to breathe a bit of life and originality into it. I won't add to the comments on punctuation and line breaks as they've already been... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
11-17-2012, 07:56 PM
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Replies: 10
Views: 533
Posted By
kdownes
I love how quickly and unexpectedly the tone of...
I love how quickly and unexpectedly the tone of this piece changes, and yet it still retains this amazingly fluid wordplay and almost playful writing style. I always enjoy your work. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
11-05-2012, 10:16 PM
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Replies: 2
Views: 213
Posted By
kdownes
And with this you've cemented your style, I feel....
And with this you've cemented your style, I feel. I don't feel a word wasted here, and the way it circles back onto itself is clever. Final line, quick punch. I liked this, very much. :) |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-25-2012, 02:10 AM
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Replies: 5
Views: 305
Posted By
kdownes
Glad you decided to post this. I liked the...
Glad you decided to post this. I liked the strength of the metaphor, it's a simple idea that works because of it's simplicity. Your writing is confident, and I'm a sucker for second person... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-24-2012, 06:21 PM
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Replies: 6
Views: 369
Posted By
kdownes
Your writing is beautiful in both form and...
Your writing is beautiful in both form and simplicity. You have a strong style that never feels forced or confining. I have no idea how you do it, but each of your pieces I've read since I've been... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-24-2012, 06:20 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 301
Posted By
kdownes
I just feel at times it felt like "style for...
I just feel at times it felt like "style for style's sake", if you know what I mean. Some of the misspellings and the like are quite clever and flow nicely, while others just felt forced or... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-24-2012, 06:18 PM
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Replies: 1,662
Views: 50,094
Posted By
kdownes
Yep, short stories, prose, etc are more than...
Yep, short stories, prose, etc are more than welcome. Just try to break it up into small parts, it's unlikely that anyone will read an entire 20 page novella in one sitting;) |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-23-2012, 10:04 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 324
Posted By
kdownes
Yes. This is great. Some of the line breaks...
Yes. This is great. Some of the line breaks around the middle of the first stanza are a little funny, but I think they work like that. New definitely beats old, Andre. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-23-2012, 07:27 AM
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Replies: 6
Views: 352
Posted By
kdownes
This is surprisingly good for an old piece,...
This is surprisingly good for an old piece, Andre. A little simple and empty, but still enjoyable. It'd be nice to see a new one, too, I was really liking where your style was headed. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-23-2012, 07:25 AM
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Replies: 5
Views: 301
Posted By
kdownes
I'm in two minds about this. I feel it lacks...
I'm in two minds about this. I feel it lacks something, and I also feel the style gets in the way a lot more than enhances, and yet, I found myself really enjoying parts. The strange rhyming... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-23-2012, 04:37 AM
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Replies: 1,662
Views: 50,094
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-22-2012, 11:00 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 368
Posted By
kdownes
I twisted that line around a little, Andre. Does...
I twisted that line around a little, Andre. Does that help? |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-22-2012, 09:42 PM
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Replies: 1,662
Views: 50,094
Posted By
kdownes
Well, I'm going to jump in on the shameless self...
Well, I'm going to jump in on the shameless self promotion and say that my first album is now for sale at http://thelastofthegreatromantics.bandcamp.com/album/story-time-for-the-great-divine right... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-22-2012, 07:47 AM
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Replies: 4
Views: 368
Posted By
kdownes
home
the road waltzes me home; the trees fire a 21 gun salute as i step deftly between dropped beats and fallen leaves. autumn breaks as only a heart can, and the blood red detritus beneath my... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-16-2012, 04:33 AM
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Replies: 12
Views: 616
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kdownes
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-15-2012, 11:49 PM
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Replies: 12
Views: 616
Posted By
kdownes
I feel the wording is a little clumsy a times, a...
I feel the wording is a little clumsy a times, a little awkward. Some of the lines drag on too long without punctuation, or are simply punctuated strangely. As a whole, I like the piece, I really do,... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-15-2012, 07:43 AM
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Replies: 2
Views: 184
Posted By
kdownes
incomplete
it's the breaking time. it crept up so slowly, i fear i missed it. passed on the way only to circle round and meet up again; boneweary, soulthirsty and somehow longing for this eventual embrace. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-08-2012, 03:38 AM
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Replies: 5
Views: 232
Posted By
kdownes
Honestly, it's like you have nothing original to...
Honestly, it's like you have nothing original to say. Which itself isn't a problem, it's hard to come up with new ideas, but if you're going to say something everyone else is saying, at least say it... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-07-2012, 10:30 AM
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Replies: 1,662
Views: 50,094
Posted By
kdownes
I don't know about the book, but the movie was...
I don't know about the book, but the movie was awesome. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-04-2012, 07:48 PM
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Replies: 2
Views: 186
Posted By
kdownes
This is my favourite bit:
I'm tired of simply...
This is my favourite bit: I'm tired of simply seeing the aftermath of accidents; the injuries on looks; the straw shelters. Everything else was good, maybe not to the quality of what you've been... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-03-2012, 07:21 AM
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Replies: 14
Views: 541
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