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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-28-2012, 01:11 AM
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Replies: 2
Views: 187
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man, i dont come back here anymore, but it's good...
man, i dont come back here anymore, but it's good to know that you're still writing. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-22-2012, 11:02 AM
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Replies: 9
Views: 340
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hippieboy444
you redeemed yourself after the first two...
you redeemed yourself after the first two stanzas: those opening two felt forced and unnatural. after that though, i enjoyed it. i like the ending esp., just 'not enough' and the line: |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-22-2012, 10:59 AM
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Replies: 4
Views: 258
Posted By
hippieboy444
i dont think the sense images you're trying to...
i dont think the sense images you're trying to evoke do much. it's like you're trying to show us a van gogh in 50x50 pixels. i think you need to develop one good idea instead of putting too many... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-17-2012, 11:18 AM
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Replies: 4
Views: 209
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hippieboy444
yeah i am not sure how i want to address the...
yeah i am not sure how i want to address the beginning. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-16-2012, 08:23 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 209
Posted By
hippieboy444
hopeless
i leave your embrace and step into freedom. i cast off the armor you called handsome and drag my feeble bones away. for so long, i've tried to defend myself with truth but i bruise myself; my... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-16-2012, 08:14 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 257
Posted By
hippieboy444
first off, i am glad i can come back to the forum...
first off, i am glad i can come back to the forum after a year and you're still posting. good. i like this and i think that you capture the moment easily and concisely. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-02-2011, 10:21 PM
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Replies: 0
Views: 111
Posted By
hippieboy444
22-14
the sun balances old thoughts with immortalities, totalities; the sum of our particles beneath the window, drifting between consciensousness and disease; we hold ourselves up to light; 'expose these... |
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Forum: The Pit
09-23-2011, 05:12 PM
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Replies: 15,019
Views: 288,077
Posted By
hippieboy444
alright so this is weird. my girlfriend and i...
alright so this is weird. my girlfriend and i having been dating four months. in the first month of the relationship, we did a lot of sexual things, often and mostly by her accord. however, over the... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-10-2011, 11:13 AM
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Replies: 8
Views: 357
Posted By
hippieboy444
you sure nail the mood and all the images...
you sure nail the mood and all the images enveloped in it. i enjoy this a lot. it just flows in and out so welkl. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-08-2011, 03:25 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 258
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hippieboy444
tooth decay
you know it all until you know nothing, until those special moments become hidden pains clutched to your heart as close as sinew to bone; the fragmented structures and membranes that falter as you... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-24-2011, 11:35 AM
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Replies: 14
Views: 415
Posted By
hippieboy444
the first six lines need to set up the...
the first six lines need to set up the desperation of the end better. the word choice seemed to be the issue. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-24-2011, 11:20 AM
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Replies: 1,622
Views: 48,806
Posted By
hippieboy444
i think i'm gonna break up with my girlfriend. i...
i think i'm gonna break up with my girlfriend. i cant seem to figure out how to tell her how i feel and she cant seem to treat me the way i need to be treated. not that it's abusive, just feels... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-22-2011, 07:23 PM
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Replies: 8
Views: 303
Posted By
hippieboy444
rattle bones
'oh' she says 'i feel so blessed with you, so right' she is faking another orgasm into my ear, as if i could trust her to be honest just one time to talk to me sincerely. i look across the room... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-17-2011, 04:28 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 255
Posted By
hippieboy444
i didn't fall in love with the writing but what...
i didn't fall in love with the writing but what you're getting at is what makes this good. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-12-2011, 10:05 AM
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Replies: 10
Views: 405
Posted By
hippieboy444
it'd be cool to somehow fit your signature into...
it'd be cool to somehow fit your signature into the piece - memories aren't for keeping, mostly just for leaving behind. otherwise, there were a few words and phrases that felt out of place IMO due... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-11-2011, 11:12 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 181
Posted By
hippieboy444
thanks. i do feel like the first stanza isn't...
thanks. i do feel like the first stanza isn't great, but i felt like it sets up the second one. gotta piece you want me to view? |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-11-2011, 12:13 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 181
Posted By
hippieboy444
what safe means
it felt so safe holding you hand wading into a divine mist searching, like there was some thing to find, we'd uncover a secret, a word washed ashore. i told myself this is not only right now. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-04-2011, 04:55 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 146
Posted By
hippieboy444
two things i cant escape from are time and wine
none of this can last forever that's definite. no, you're not sweet, you don't think of me that way you dont spend your time feeling lonely. we only live a street apart, why do i only see you on... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
07-24-2011, 11:15 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 180
Posted By
hippieboy444
thanks for reading guys. especially rushmore,...
thanks for reading guys. especially rushmore, man, i've not been hanging around much anymore so thanks for the guidance on your pieces. i'm messing with changing the lifeboat metaphor but it seems... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
07-24-2011, 12:09 AM
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Replies: 4
Views: 180
Posted By
hippieboy444
like a river
yeah, well we all make those promises at one point, when magnets and sugars pull and push us from the sweeping precipes of everything at stake to everything possibly gained; i too have looked into... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
07-13-2011, 05:00 PM
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Replies: 2
Views: 172
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hippieboy444
this is so relevant to life...thanks for this....
this is so relevant to life...thanks for this. love it., |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
06-30-2011, 05:30 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 177
Posted By
hippieboy444
it felt like you're trying to hard to milk it....
it felt like you're trying to hard to milk it. you could say a lot more with a lot less. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
06-29-2011, 06:46 PM
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Replies: 0
Views: 155
Posted By
hippieboy444
park city, 1980
the music doesn't lift my spirit so much now that all our beginnings have been weaved and are left tumbling toward the floor; the few moments left to embrace are finished, the light of past fading... |
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Forum: The Pit
05-31-2011, 08:33 AM
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Replies: 12,366
Views: 457,703
Posted By
hippieboy444
i hate to admit this in the pit but...
whenever...
i hate to admit this in the pit but... whenever my girlfriend gives me a handjob or blowjob, i just cant finish. it's not that's she doing anything wrong, either, cause it feels awesome; i just cant... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
05-23-2011, 12:10 PM
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Replies: 0
Views: 161
Posted By
hippieboy444
this i dig of you.
'this is dig of you'. you dont love me. that's why you never make time. a walk home, fifteen minutes, speak too soft to say i love you and hug to quickly to know if you could hear my heart beating.... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
05-08-2011, 11:10 PM
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Replies: 21
Views: 359
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
05-01-2011, 01:17 AM
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Replies: 1
Views: 145
Posted By
hippieboy444
priorities
girls in porn are the only girls worth a f.uck ; the synthetic balance and pointillism of their complexions the sutble curves at the corners of their mouths, turning up and they are the only... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-30-2011, 12:53 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 362
Posted By
hippieboy444
this is exactly what i needed/wanted to read....
this is exactly what i needed/wanted to read. aaron it's phenomenal. i love it. i think like this a lot. |
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Forum: Guitar Techniques
04-05-2011, 09:45 PM
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Replies: 1,657
Sticky: Need halp? - Technique Analysis
Views: 106,366
Posted By
hippieboy444
maybe not related to tech, but check this...
maybe not related to tech, but check this out! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gOtM-v0xJ6s&feature=related |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
03-30-2011, 10:36 PM
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Replies: 1,622
Views: 48,806
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