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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
05-26-2013, 06:14 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 251
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greyeyedfire
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
05-26-2013, 06:09 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 190
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greyeyedfire
Your writing is full of this elaborate imagery...
Your writing is full of this elaborate imagery and philosophical comments, but goes all over the place and lacks a strength. Try cutting back on a lot of words. Not necessarily in a minimalist... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
05-24-2013, 02:25 AM
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Replies: 5
Views: 291
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greyeyedfire
I Fear I May Have Missed a Foot or Two
There was a time when Madii told me all about her dreams, her fears, her favorite things I ruined it now I can only listen to her sleep fearing the things she dreams of me |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-29-2013, 01:44 AM
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Replies: 1
Views: 277
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
12-30-2012, 08:53 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 170
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greyeyedfire
Bored On My Favorite Holiday
We just laid there and watched the sky her looking for the beauty in every star me too scared to breathe because it might set her off and ruin the new year |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
11-05-2012, 10:06 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 215
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Speechless
Moving around furniture to make room for carpentry projects with my father places for friends to sit and watch tv even vacuumed the carpet so the girlfriend can come home to a clean apartment I... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-18-2012, 05:54 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 267
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You still are one of the most talented writers...
You still are one of the most talented writers I've ever had the pleasure of reading. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-04-2012, 02:27 AM
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Replies: 4
Views: 210
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
10-04-2012, 12:19 AM
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Replies: 4
Views: 210
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greyeyedfire
Flower
http://i.imgur.com/VYacJ.jpg If any mods feel this doesn't qualify as writing, feel free to remove it. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-02-2012, 10:34 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 213
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greyeyedfire
I didn't know how to end it because the ending...
I didn't know how to end it because the ending hasn't happened yet. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-01-2012, 06:41 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 213
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greyeyedfire
Just Like Old Times
I'm in one of my moods again so she keeps her distance content to know I'll come back to her on wings of steel and ink calling her my Konstantine she'll kiss me in my living room then I'll sing her... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
08-01-2012, 03:33 PM
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Replies: 10
Views: 367
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
07-29-2012, 12:34 AM
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Replies: 4
Views: 297
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greyeyedfire
x-xxx-xxx-xxxx
I finally worked up the nerve to call her she answered without a word and we held our conversation in silence I fell asleep first and she stayed up a little longer obsessed with my breathing |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
07-16-2012, 10:09 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 263
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
07-07-2012, 01:37 PM
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Replies: 9
Views: 628
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
07-06-2012, 10:33 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 125
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Entitlement
She's hiding behind half-assed kisses and divorcing parents waiting for me to write that poem I promised her while I hang on to dead love/hate relationships content to know that I'm daydreaming about... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
06-30-2012, 08:56 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 220
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greyeyedfire
Silly Little Lullabies
She could have done it gracefully but her way's cuter twisting and wrenching her way in between my guitar and me |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
06-25-2012, 01:41 AM
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Replies: 9
Views: 382
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
06-24-2012, 11:52 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 192
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
06-23-2012, 11:28 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 259
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greyeyedfire
Much too long for it's own good, but more...
Much too long for it's own good, but more importantly, I believe the last few lines weakened the piece. You told me what you were feeling when you should have been showing me. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
06-23-2012, 11:24 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 249
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greyeyedfire
I agree with Dylan,
last two lines would be...
I agree with Dylan, last two lines would be stronger without the explanation beforehand. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
06-19-2012, 10:51 AM
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Replies: 10
Views: 428
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greyeyedfire
<3
She would whisper cute little nothings in my sleep like "I heart you" while she was tying me to the bed You learn to miss certain things |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
06-18-2012, 10:33 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 162
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greyeyedfire
I like this much more than your other piece on...
I like this much more than your other piece on the front page right now. This confusing, difficult format was perfect. The messages mixed within each other distracted you despite which story you... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
06-18-2012, 10:23 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 254
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greyeyedfire
I feel it's a great showcase of what you can do. ...
I feel it's a great showcase of what you can do. It has the simple emotion I strive for in my own writing, but with a certain wordiness and warmth that so well compliments the optimism. Check your... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
05-26-2012, 10:24 PM
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Replies: 2
Views: 238
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greyeyedfire
She Doesn't Deserve Me
She woke up to find me clawing my way back up to my hands and knees my determination forcing its way back in between heartbeats Taylor she says my name and grabs my shoulder and I feel better |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
05-24-2012, 07:06 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 239
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greyeyedfire
French Is For Bastards
I wanted to leave without a word but we both knew that wasn't going to happen so she came up to me waving her hands and moving her hips speaking a language only me and her understand she stood up on... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
05-10-2012, 10:06 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 207
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greyeyedfire
To The Rhythm of Carnival Music
She kicked down my front door screaming something or other about ex-girlfriends and as soon as she dropped Jamie's name my ears tuned out and played a little tune in my head I call it "This... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-08-2012, 06:36 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 174
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greyeyedfire
dum spiro
She kisses me in two stages first, she comes in smiling puts her arms around me, pulls herself close and closes her eyes at the last second like I'm all she's ever wanted Then she remembers what i... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
03-17-2012, 12:14 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 215
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greyeyedfire
Miracle
It's in those moments when his cheek presses against the top of her chest that she almost feels guilty It'll pass soon Silly boy, with all his hopes and dreams I'll make a man out of him He's just... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
02-26-2012, 11:14 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 217
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greyeyedfire
...............
I just woke up to find her there gently humming happy little songs smiling at me like nothing was wrong but just as quickly was all my pain gone She took it from me |
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