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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 04-10-2014, 07:35 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 356
Posted By 21wickwing
Does it actually reference Catcher in the Rye in...

Does it actually reference Catcher in the Rye in any way... I have never read it nor do I know what it is about either. I just don't seem to be grasping what the "dream" actually is describing. To...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 04-08-2014, 05:58 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 169
Posted By 21wickwing
It is the progression of a relationship between...

It is the progression of a relationship between myself and a woman.

Unfortunately it doesn't have the spacing I used in my word doc. And I don't know how to make that work here
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 04-07-2014, 10:39 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 169
Posted By 21wickwing
Overplayed

(The underscores represent empty space in the poem.... I couldn't get it to replicate my word doc)

June 21st, 2009
We make our way to our table for two
A second date _________ something...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 04-05-2014, 02:10 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 320
Posted By 21wickwing
Thank you! Yeah I am not too satisfied with this...

Thank you! Yeah I am not too satisfied with this poem and I got frustrated because I wanted to expand it but then I dropped it haha
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 03-19-2014, 07:31 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 320
Posted By 21wickwing
Hahaha thanks for your homily Eccer :p but I want...

Hahaha thanks for your homily Eccer :p but I want to expand on this... So I will. Glad you liked it!
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 03-19-2014, 07:29 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 484
Posted By 21wickwing
Hahaha I learned Gavage will writing this !

Hahaha I learned Gavage will writing this !
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 03-16-2014, 06:57 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 320
Posted By 21wickwing
Beyond Rhyme and Reason

If poetry is the basis of all thought- what then? Since the beginning of time, we have sent our best and brightest to interpret our world through artfully chosen words and wise structure, and yet we...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 03-15-2014, 11:07 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 414
Posted By 21wickwing
I had to read this like 5 times haha. The more I...

I had to read this like 5 times haha. The more I read it, the more I liked it. Every time I read it I saw new things in the poem. I love the spider theme you embrace here. I also love the mystery of...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 03-15-2014, 11:02 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 399
Posted By 21wickwing
This is a wonderful piece. I love how you...

This is a wonderful piece. I love how you consistently go back to the images of man and woman and chair in the first line.

Also, Neil de Grasse Tyson can clear up some of your questions in Cosmos...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 03-12-2014, 09:16 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 338
Posted By 21wickwing
congratulations on WOTW! I quite enjoyed it... as...

congratulations on WOTW! I quite enjoyed it... as previously indicated
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 03-12-2014, 08:53 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 484
Posted By 21wickwing
Well, I suppose that is up for you to decide...

Well, I suppose that is up for you to decide ;)

Maybe I just really don't like Rice Krispies :o
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 03-10-2014, 10:20 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 430
Posted By 21wickwing
I was half expecting Pharrell lyrics....

I was half expecting Pharrell lyrics. :)

However, I found this piece paced rather well.

I would add to the previous critique the lines "Tired all the time/Nothing in my mind" ... I think that...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 03-10-2014, 09:57 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 338
Posted By 21wickwing
I know I haven't been around a whiles but this is...

I know I haven't been around a whiles but this is one of the best pieces I remember reading from you. Great imagery, rhythm. I don't know how you could make this any better.
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 03-10-2014, 09:52 PM
Replies: 5
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Views: 302
Posted By 21wickwing
I love the title...

I love the title <3

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Otherwise

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Booootifullll
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 03-10-2014, 09:51 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 484
Posted By 21wickwing
Snap. Crackle. Pop.

*is violent. Much warning. C4C*

The stream rushed into the plastic bowl.
It splattered among the contents in there.
Mother did something different this mo(u)rn.
That awful sound seared through my...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 10-29-2013, 06:06 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 276
Posted By 21wickwing
I posted a different link. Maybe that will work.

I posted a different link. Maybe that will work.
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 10-25-2013, 12:45 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 276
Posted By 21wickwing
10.25.13

(I actually recently started a tumblr where I write a story and post a page every day. I was really inspired for this page and wrote it as if it could stand alone as a prose....
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 10-25-2013, 12:43 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 455
Posted By 21wickwing
Sorry for the late response. I really appreciated...

Sorry for the late response. I really appreciated this poem a ton. I honestly could feel the passion growing (PUNS!) throughout. I could see this as a great performance poetry piece. Good job!
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 10-10-2013, 02:00 AM
Replies: 1,900
Views: 61,059
Posted By 21wickwing
drunk... comp??? Yes!!!

drunk...

comp???

Yes!!!
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 10-10-2013, 01:58 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 582
Posted By 21wickwing
Don't go away! Get carried back!!!! Great job on...

Don't go away! Get carried back!!!!

Great job on WotW by the way! Well Deserved!
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 10-10-2013, 01:45 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 179
Posted By 21wickwing
This is a suitable heavy metal song. However,...

This is a suitable heavy metal song.

However, the whole death to all, apocalypse, thing is a bit cliche in the genre.

My suggestion would be to take this an focus on something small within it....
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 10-10-2013, 01:36 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 326
Posted By 21wickwing
I really like how simple this is. It has great...

I really like how simple this is. It has great imagery throughout and an excellent flow to it. Good job!

A couple edits:

1) I would say "Memories hold* this truth"

2) "No wonder we learned history...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 10-10-2013, 01:25 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 282
Posted By 21wickwing
To be honest, I really really enjoyed this! I...

To be honest, I really really enjoyed this! I love the second stanza the most. I just feel like reading this out loud and I can feel the emotion coming from my speech.

It seems you made some edits...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 10-10-2013, 01:18 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 576
Posted By 21wickwing
Cooper, At Sea

It felt like he’d traveled ten miles
since the last time he inhaled oxygen.
The darkness seemed to squeeze
his lungs towards the point of implosion.
As he reached and reached and he reached
Reached...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 09-27-2013, 02:02 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 525
Posted By 21wickwing
Yes I am working on that. The entire reason I...

Yes I am working on that. The entire reason I started the vlog was to improve my public speaking.
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 09-19-2013, 11:59 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 525
Posted By 21wickwing
Thanks for Writing of the Week! I been trying...

Thanks for Writing of the Week! I been trying ALLLL THESE YEARS!!!!
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 09-17-2013, 10:54 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 525
Posted By 21wickwing
thanks Eccer! I should find time to go through...

thanks Eccer! I should find time to go through and crit things! Haha
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 09-15-2013, 05:13 PM
Replies: 0
Views: 159
Posted By 21wickwing
Objects to Destiny

Objects to Destiny—
a Forest loses its Leaves—
What’s left in Me—
To Nothing—I retrieve—

Mansions of tiled Floors—
Rooms of varying Color—
Windows stained—mahogany Doors—
House my Horrors—at the...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 09-11-2013, 07:56 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 525
Posted By 21wickwing
WotW: The Pipeline

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6aL4KUkOuYE



I envy most others and their innate ability to connect to small conversations and truly engage --enjoy even --the daily lives of their fellow community...
Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics 08-26-2013, 03:16 PM
Replies: 0
Views: 186
Posted By 21wickwing
Redd, Green, and Bleu (wip)

Lucius Redd had a curious stance
as his head hung low,
but his stature so tall
that onlookers were entranced.
Redd was a powerful demon
who at the wish of Satan
could withdraw the red liquids
from...
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