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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
03-29-2013, 09:29 PM
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Replies: 0
Views: 161
Posted By
Fredmac12
Circles
Your face I once looked for Now haunts my nights and plagues my days, Your name rattling and so my mind plays. I so wish to find a reason To give you blame, and deface the past But still finding... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
02-25-2013, 01:00 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 240
Posted By
Fredmac12
Well it's about growing older/growing up? Yes? I...
Well it's about growing older/growing up? Yes? I liked the chorus a lot. Especially the last line. I think the verse 2 is not as good, mainly because I don't understand it! The very first line I... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
02-25-2013, 11:57 AM
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Replies: 3
Views: 166
Posted By
Fredmac12
I'd suggest you post your lyrics in a separate...
I'd suggest you post your lyrics in a separate thread then just leave a link for other people to crit your piece. It's a lot simpler that way, thanks for giving my lyrics a look, post yours in a... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
02-24-2013, 09:33 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 166
Posted By
Fredmac12
You have it all (Do you?)
Not yet finished I don't think, the ending was rushed to make it not feel it ended abruptly, but I intend to carry it on and thus change this ending. On you go you've got it all Everything you want,... |
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Forum: The Pit
11-30-2012, 05:35 PM
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Replies: 40
Views: 859
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Fredmac12
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Forum: The Pit
11-30-2012, 04:26 PM
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Replies: 40
Views: 859
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Fredmac12
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics Techniques
11-21-2012, 04:49 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 347
Posted By
Fredmac12
Yeah I know, forced things just sound, well...
Yeah I know, forced things just sound, well forced hahah. I write things down as you say, always better to have the vague idea then you might find a better way to word it later! |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics Techniques
11-21-2012, 04:24 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 347
Posted By
Fredmac12
Problems developing ideas...
Does anyone else ever have a good idea for a song, then after writing the first verse have problems continuing further? Also does anyone have problems putting an idea into a chorus, without being too... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-29-2012, 01:21 PM
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Replies: 7
Views: 325
Posted By
Fredmac12
If you had to read it twice, that's just what I...
If you had to read it twice, that's just what I was after with this piece! Thanks, I'll take a look at your work when I'm on my computer not my phone |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-27-2012, 07:58 AM
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Replies: 7
Views: 325
Posted By
Fredmac12
I didn't feel that rhyme was forced actually, imo...
I didn't feel that rhyme was forced actually, imo it's genuinely what I was trying to say, but thanks for the feedback! |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-25-2012, 05:58 PM
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Replies: 6
Views: 347
Posted By
Fredmac12
Overall I liked the ideas behind this, and it...
Overall I liked the ideas behind this, and it shows some promise, but there are (as pointed out) parts where I feel it's a little forced and simple. Good work though, and if you like writing lyrics,... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-25-2012, 05:48 PM
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Replies: 7
Views: 325
Posted By
Fredmac12
Thanks! I am a fan of trying to use contradicting...
Thanks! I am a fan of trying to use contradicting things, paradoxes, impossibilities etc... If you have any thing you want me to take a look at leave a link :) |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-25-2012, 04:38 PM
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Replies: 10
Views: 354
Posted By
Fredmac12
Not sure about repeating the chorus directly...
Not sure about repeating the chorus directly after the chorus if that's what the 'chorus 2x' means, it's overly repetitive. Maybe repeat it and the end and do as factor said by cutting it off. As a... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-25-2012, 10:25 AM
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Replies: 3
Views: 155
Posted By
Fredmac12
It specifically says in the rules not to repost...
It specifically says in the rules not to repost for that reason... I'll have to just in case. *reported* |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics Contests
09-25-2012, 10:23 AM
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Replies: 135
Sticky: 1v1 Challenge Thread : Season IX
Views: 13,726
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Fredmac12
I'm new to the 1v1 thing, I'd accept this, if we...
I'm new to the 1v1 thing, I'd accept this, if we can find out how it works! |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-25-2012, 10:18 AM
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Replies: 7
Views: 325
Posted By
Fredmac12
Unseen by the unseen
Very different to my other pieces, thought I'd try something else. And all will hear, but hear nothing All seeing but all blind, For here and there unaware so fair 'tis unfair to be aware of the... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-24-2012, 06:55 AM
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Replies: 22
Views: 641
Posted By
Fredmac12
The fact is this piece makes absolutely no sense,...
The fact is this piece makes absolutely no sense, but that is the point of it (I guess). Therefore taking into account some people don't like things without meaning, which is fair enough, then it... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-24-2012, 06:37 AM
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Replies: 4
Views: 178
Posted By
Fredmac12
It might just be hard to see, and I'm blinded due...
It might just be hard to see, and I'm blinded due to being the writer. I don't know the quote, but I'll keep it in mind! Thanks. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-23-2012, 05:15 AM
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Replies: 4
Views: 178
Posted By
Fredmac12
I see your point, to me I felt there was a...
I see your point, to me I felt there was a context if you looked into the lyrics to find it. However as I wrote it I would obviously find that easy to see. It's a working progress, I'll try and make... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-22-2012, 04:47 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 150
Posted By
Fredmac12
I really enjoyed this! The rhyming, and internal...
I really enjoyed this! The rhyming, and internal rhymes especially were brilliant and didn't seem forced. The ending was perfect and fitted really well. If there was one thing I'd criticise it would... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-22-2012, 04:42 PM
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Replies: 2
Views: 175
Posted By
Fredmac12
Check out some of my work if you have a chance! ...
Check out some of my work if you have a chance! :D http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1560053 http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1561729 |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-22-2012, 04:39 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 247
Posted By
Fredmac12
I liked this piece on a whole, with only a few...
I liked this piece on a whole, with only a few minor improvements that (to me anyway) would make it better. Good work! Check out some of my work if you have a chance! :D... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-21-2012, 12:08 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 178
Posted By
Fredmac12
Perfection
You had nothing to gain Everything to lose But you lost it all And you're better of for it You couldn't take the stress Of keeping it together You thrive on the freedom You can now keep forever If... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-14-2012, 11:19 AM
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Replies: 6
Views: 251
Posted By
Fredmac12
Could very well be, I always find it quite hard...
Could very well be, I always find it quite hard to get the flow of something without the music. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-14-2012, 11:07 AM
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Replies: 6
Views: 251
Posted By
Fredmac12
They're the only places I feel the flow is not as...
They're the only places I feel the flow is not as good, it's not bad just the rest is better. However this could just be the way I'm reading or something. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-14-2012, 11:02 AM
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Replies: 2
Views: 288
Posted By
Fredmac12
Thanks for the feedback!
Yeah the up and down is...
Thanks for the feedback! Yeah the up and down is deliberate, the second verse is intended to be a faster, I think it could maybe do with a bit added to it, to increase the length. It would probably... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-14-2012, 06:54 AM
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Replies: 6
Views: 251
Posted By
Fredmac12
It's nice, quite thought provoking, fairly vague...
It's nice, quite thought provoking, fairly vague and maybe a bit ambiguous but I like that. Especially as a first attempt it's very good. I think in a few parts it could flow a bit better, if you... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
09-14-2012, 06:49 AM
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Replies: 5
Views: 179
Posted By
Fredmac12
I like the verses a lot, and also I think the...
I like the verses a lot, and also I think the chorus could be quite catchy too, depending on how it's played/sung. It needs to be punchy, and split into syllables (that doesn't make that much sense),... |
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Forum: The Pit
09-10-2012, 07:16 AM
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Replies: 97
Views: 2,645
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Fredmac12
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Forum: The Pit
09-08-2012, 01:47 PM
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Replies: 20
Views: 342
Posted By
Fredmac12
About the second thing I said, anyone think...
About the second thing I said, anyone think foster the people - waste is happy but sounds sad? |
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