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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics Contests
05-13-2013, 03:47 PM
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Replies: 1
Poll: [VOTING-Finals] Spring
Views: 206
Posted By
ZanasCross
To be clear, even though I'm in here, I voted. My...
To be clear, even though I'm in here, I voted. My piece didn't deserve to win, so I voted otherwise. Just so there is no confusion later. :cheers: Also, so a new post shows up in the comp forums... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
05-10-2013, 02:14 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 266
Posted By
ZanasCross
this was good. this would be better with...
this was good. this would be better with punctuation. still a worthy wotw. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics Contests
05-02-2013, 08:37 AM
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Replies: 14
Views: 394
Posted By
ZanasCross
Hey Jims, when you get a chance could you update...
Hey Jims, when you get a chance could you update to make sure which pieces you've received already? My internet died when I tried to send it the first time, and I'm not sure if it came through. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-29-2013, 12:16 PM
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Replies: 14
Views: 686
Posted By
ZanasCross
Thanks everyone.
I'm surprised a bit you guys...
Thanks everyone. I'm surprised a bit you guys don't like the "No" line. I really love the way it inserts a staccato. I read it with a very "authoritarian voice" in the way of "No. *pause for a... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics Contests
04-29-2013, 10:03 AM
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Replies: 14
Views: 394
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ZanasCross
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-18-2013, 12:11 PM
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Replies: 2
Views: 203
Posted By
ZanasCross
I wanted so dearly to like this.
It has this...
I wanted so dearly to like this. It has this gravitas (that I generally feel your poetry has) that is classic. I always imagine your poetry being read by some deep-voiced godly-man while he looks... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-14-2013, 09:45 PM
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Replies: 6
Views: 318
Posted By
ZanasCross
This was great. I hope to come back and be more...
This was great. I hope to come back and be more constructive, but if I forget, know it was enjoyed. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-11-2013, 09:53 PM
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Replies: 7
Views: 556
Posted By
ZanasCross
Congrats, this is well deserved. Solid piece, as...
Congrats, this is well deserved. Solid piece, as I said before. :golfclap: |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-10-2013, 08:29 AM
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Replies: 2
Views: 199
Posted By
ZanasCross
and where these things meet, under (+)
a sky...
and where these things meet, under (+) a sky barely visible from the city’s foundations, the first stories of steel beams and skeletons(+) of future buildings, rise like shouts(+) between rooftops in... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-09-2013, 11:55 AM
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Replies: 7
Views: 556
Posted By
ZanasCross
This is a really solid piece; but I think it...
This is a really solid piece; but I think it needs some cleaning up and some punctuating to really take it from "solid outline" to completed piece. The second stanza is just a bit out of line with... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-08-2013, 11:28 AM
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Replies: 3
Views: 277
Posted By
ZanasCross
This is on the verge of being a solid piece. I...
This is on the verge of being a solid piece. I think the issue isn't the technique (especially considering how much I enjoy mixing science terminology with poetry)... but a problem of tone control.... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-08-2013, 11:21 AM
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Replies: 4
Views: 273
Posted By
ZanasCross
This is actually one of the more solid true...
This is actually one of the more solid true "songs" I've seen on here in a while. The main issue I have is the refrain of "in a hall of mirrors." In every stanza, it seems tacked on to the end. It... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-06-2013, 12:14 AM
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Replies: 5
Views: 302
Posted By
ZanasCross
I loved everything up until the large break....
I loved everything up until the large break. After that, I felt like you were "trying to hard" to resolve this into something more meaningful than a self-referential poem. If you don't have that, I... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-05-2013, 09:01 AM
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Replies: 14
Views: 686
Posted By
ZanasCross
WotW: Envelopes
The butterfly bursts from it's coccoon, rippling probababilistic envelopes through time. And she was there, a raven in her hair and the ocean in her smile. And he was there, eyes upon her breasts,... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-02-2013, 08:47 AM
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Replies: 8
Views: 627
Posted By
ZanasCross
Fred_Away. Some of his most consistently high...
Fred_Away. Some of his most consistently high quality months. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
04-01-2013, 08:41 AM
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Replies: 1,621
Views: 48,761
Posted By
ZanasCross
Post a video of you slamming in the nude. It's...
Post a video of you slamming in the nude. It's the only way. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
03-23-2013, 06:13 PM
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Replies: 1,621
Views: 48,761
Posted By
ZanasCross
Flogging Molly was my first show. Man... nothing...
Flogging Molly was my first show. Man... nothing has ever lived up to that level of energy both from the band and the crowd. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
03-15-2013, 11:13 AM
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Replies: 1,621
Views: 48,761
Posted By
ZanasCross
Congrats Andre (3000)! Also, well done Allen. Not...
Congrats Andre (3000)! Also, well done Allen. Not the easiest time to be an S&L mod and you handled it with class. :cheers: to both! |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
03-08-2013, 09:29 AM
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Replies: 1,621
Views: 48,761
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ZanasCross
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
03-07-2013, 09:43 AM
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Replies: 1,621
Views: 48,761
Posted By
ZanasCross
That only counts if you simultaneously eat a...
That only counts if you simultaneously eat a whole large pizza while killing hookers. Otherwise, you're still a boy. |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
02-24-2013, 09:21 PM
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Replies: 8
Views: 405
Posted By
ZanasCross
For what it's worth, I really enjoyed this read....
For what it's worth, I really enjoyed this read. I typically dislike structured poetry; because it always feels like plot or detail is scraficed to "make weight," but this felt very natural. Even if... |
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Forum: The Pit
02-22-2013, 10:49 AM
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Replies: 58
Views: 1,536
Posted By
ZanasCross
Actually, depending on the breed (Yorkies are...
Actually, depending on the breed (Yorkies are known for this), if it pops all the way out, it can get stuck. If you don't put it back in normally, blood flow can get cut off and it can necrose. I'd... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
02-16-2013, 10:59 AM
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Replies: 1,621
Views: 48,761
Posted By
ZanasCross
Mead making is relaxing. I really enjoy the...
Mead making is relaxing. I really enjoy the process (other than the 6 month waiting period). I had a nice cycle where I had a new batch ready every month before I moved... now I have no mead. It... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
02-12-2013, 01:00 PM
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Replies: 1,621
Views: 48,761
Posted By
ZanasCross
Not that this does much good, Fred, but I can...
Not that this does much good, Fred, but I can relate. I was roughly where you are my freshman/sophomore year of college. I had spent up until as a solo unit, I had friends; but if they disappeared... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
02-12-2013, 12:54 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 165
Posted By
ZanasCross
Normally, I find your work to be both well...
Normally, I find your work to be both well constructed and hyper-relateable. Like, even though you're talking about things that are in your life, I find my life in it somehow. However, this I only... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
02-11-2013, 01:49 PM
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Replies: 8
Views: 789
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ZanasCross
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
02-01-2013, 12:00 PM
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Replies: 1,621
Views: 48,761
Posted By
ZanasCross
^:golfclap: Congrats man!
EDIT: ghost'd by a...
^:golfclap: Congrats man! EDIT: ghost'd by a goldfish. ^ => ^^ |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
01-30-2013, 09:12 AM
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Replies: 1,621
Views: 48,761
Posted By
ZanasCross
If you have a minute, could you explain what you...
If you have a minute, could you explain what you would change? This is a whole new realm to all of us; and recording these was basically done for the learning experience (and to have something to... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
01-29-2013, 09:27 AM
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Replies: 1,621
Views: 48,761
Posted By
ZanasCross
Haven't had time to read the rest of this whole...
Haven't had time to read the rest of this whole discussion; but I couldn't disagree more with you on this point. I listen to lots of instrumental music; and I get mental images from songs like that... |
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Forum: Songwriting & Lyrics
01-23-2013, 09:41 AM
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Replies: 21
Views: 1,375
Posted By
ZanasCross
Second free lap dance from Jimi, to this song:...
Second free lap dance from Jimi, to this song: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NHozn0YXAeE |
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