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Old 11-21-2010, 06:03 PM   #1
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In caelo

In caelo (latin for in heaven)
Music is sort of Porcupine Tree alt-rock style
Ofcourse C4C


"Verse"
Be humble and small no evil or sin
Harmless and pure, always give in
Bow for the judgement, kneel for the king
At the end theres reward, halo and wing

"Chorus"
Are there any answers
(That can) tell me how to exist?
An indulgence for my dubiety
Is not enough for me to persist

"Verse"
Could be all so worthless and waste of devotion
For eveything there is chosing demotion
Clench my conscious, give me words to swear
5 days to create 2 ways too share

"Chorus"
Are there any answers
(That can) tell me how to exist?
An indulgence for my dubiety
Is not enough for me to persist
Are there more then stories
That tell what a being is
God give me water to stand on
Cause now ignorance inequals bliss

"Interlude"
All the forces that there may be
What determines soul and heart
Shall I know the origine and purpose of me
When my oblivion will start

"Spoken/whispered/rapped":
(I don't know and don't care I don't)

"chorus"
Are there any answers
(That can) tell me how to exist?
An indulgence for my dubiety
Is not enough for me to persist
Are there more then stories
That tell what a being is
God give me water to stand on
Cause now ignorance inequals bliss


A sort of agnostic/existentialistic lyric. Tell me what you think!

*title editted*
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Old 11-22-2010, 03:02 PM   #2
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first, it's in caelo
second, I like it, it's an accurate summary of the agnostic thinking. Especially the line 'I don't know and I don't care I don't'.
I can't say I'm bored in any part of the song, the information flow keeps going throughout. Good work!
I have a piece on the first page I think, It's called 'Hells Angels'. Do you mind having a look at it?
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Old 11-22-2010, 06:07 PM   #3
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Originally Posted by Karel Juwet
first, it's in caelo
second, I like it, it's an accurate summary of the agnostic thinking. Especially the line 'I don't know and I don't care I don't'.
I can't say I'm bored in any part of the song, the information flow keeps going throughout. Good work!
I have a piece on the first page I think, It's called 'Hells Angels'. Do you mind having a look at it?


Yeah you`re right, but strange enough it already was put as in caelo on my computer so I probably just mistyped it here...

But thanks!
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Old 12-12-2010, 10:34 AM   #4
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That's generally pretty cool, a nice touch with the spoken/whispered/rapped idea - were you possibly thinking domething along the lines of Bring Me to Life - Evanescence?
On top of that, nice wording and imagery. All in all, great job.
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Old 12-30-2010, 11:55 AM   #5
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Originally Posted by NeedMoreBullets
That's generally pretty cool, a nice touch with the spoken/whispered/rapped idea - were you possibly thinking domething along the lines of Bring Me to Life - Evanescence?
On top of that, nice wording and imagery. All in all, great job.


I hardly know the song Bring Me to Life so actually no, it wasn`t something along those lines
I`m a big Porcupine Tree-fan, and sometimes so sort of whisper/talk their lyrics.

But thanks!
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