f_ck_it

Kill me again

I am, anything but here, erased from the face of reality
A black hole inside. consumes all the light. supposed to exist?.
I shield my face, drive indiscretion, Through my heart?.
I cant feel you, quivering and, numb?..
Lying?
waiting for hope to find me,
love to resurrect me,
but ?til then, I don?t care

Go on
Shoot me again
You can?t
Cause I?m already dead
**** with
My ****ing head
I won?t
Feel you, anything, anymore

I search, quietly through my shame, finding nothing at all
But your face, and all my pain, I don?t care
As I stare blank, my heart turns to ash, face to stone
I am nothing, and its your fault, **** you
Listening
I heard everything
every knife you drive
in my back, I don?t care

bring out your weapons,
antagonizing lies,
they?ll backfire off,
what?s dead to you

Go on
Shoot me again
You can?t
Cause I?m already dead
**** with
My ****ing head
I won?t
Feel you, anything, anymore (X2)

(solo)

bring out your weapons,
antagonizing lies,
they?ll backfire off,
what?s dead to you


Go on
Shoot me again
You can?t
Cause I?m already dead
**** with
My ****ing head
I won?t
Feel you, anything, anymore

Have another ****ing stab
It wont hurt
Im already ****ing dead
To you. (X2)

dtony_bigs

Man that's the best composed song I've ever seen posted, although I'm a newbie. Not much for the mood of the song, but it's a breathe of fresh air from "your heart is like a flower, with love i shall shower." I like it because you realize every line doesn't have to rhyme.

Chimaira

Ehh.. Not so much to me. Sounds like the bastard child of Children Of Bodom and any Emo band. There were a couple spots with intelligent lyrics though. It's just not a song that's breaking any ground, it's just the sanme, "My girlfriend broke up with me so now I hate her."

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raise_the_dead

^Granted, it's your standard emo dirge, but it's actually pretty well-written. I like the chorus.

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According to BS statistics, 92% of teens have moved on to rap. If you're among the 8% who doesn't consider rap to be real music, donate your brains, as you clearly aren't using them.

f_ck_it

thanks guys, i actually didnt write it about a girl who broke up with me :P But of course thats what it looks like cause thats what evry 2nd song on here is about. Its actually a little more complex than that, but make of it what you want.

Too much rhyme sounds cheesy imo, and too many complex metaphors and simlies sound stupid after a while too. Thanks again ppl.