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Old 12-03-2012, 04:49 AM   #1
Hellharicot
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Hei! Well, I have worked on the lyrics of a song a couple of months ago, and I am still working on its music. Should be some power metal with both progressive and symphonic influences... Anyhow, the song is meant to be 'evolutive' and move from one feeling to its 'opposite' - here from hate to regret. As I am French I struggled a little on these English lyrics! I think English speakers are the ones who can help me the most though. Here it is:

I am the ghost following your steps,
The man that's heard what you never said...
I know rules sometimes may be unfair,
Well you lost the game, now it's time to pay!

You can't run away from the judges:
The court's willing to hear your story.
Heard the whisper 'check', there's no give in...
You've sown everything, now take on and reap...

I remember the promise that you made!
I remember the feelings we can't take!
I remember all of my mistakes,
Those words you will regret,
'cause you are so faithless...

I withstood our fate with all my faith,
Even though we got drowned in the waves,
The ocean's the burden you can't take...
Aren't Scorpios meant to stand? 'no pain no gain'!

Tried to dominate, cannot give way,
Help it fade away 'til it's all dead...
Truth useless to tell, silence remains...
Can you hear the whisper? 'You are checkmate'...

I remember the promise that you made!
I remember the feelings we can't take!
I remember all of my mistakes,
Those words I won't regret,
'cause you are so faithless...

Wanted to hear, words that you've missed,
Needed to see, things that are real,
Wanted to be, forever free,
All our story, our destiny!

Through all our past, something will last,
For what I am, for who you are,
Tear us apart, speak to my heart,
Another path, a brand new start...

I remember the promise that I made!
I remember the feelings we can't take!
I remember all of my mistakes,
These words I will regret,
'cause you are so far away...


Cheers!
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Old 12-04-2012, 10:29 AM   #2
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What's it about? really like it...your english is pretty good!
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Old 12-04-2012, 01:04 PM   #3
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Thanks for the compliment, I appreciate! I hope I haven't left any mistake in the lyrics...

What inspired me for this song is the love stories a friend of mine once told me. Basically, he told me how they all ended and what he passed through after them. I try to illustrate all the phases people go through when they end a relationship: first, they feel hate for their ex, and blame them for all their pain; then they start questionning themselves; finally, they realize what they lived belongs to the past, and may feel remorse.
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Old 12-07-2012, 03:05 PM   #4
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Well, you took a cliche topic and made it new...gotta give you credit for that!
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