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So-Called New-Age(d) Poet
Join Date: Aug 2007
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A Job
Kissed Katie below her left eye
as I stepped to be next in line to grow old (i.e. working for eight hours; wasting gas on traffic jams; losing track of the music scene; __________________________ __________________________ __________________________ __________________________) I’ll cross that line to get glances of pride and obey obey obey and serve until I undress myself of all values in a small cubicle. A piece was added to the mechanism and the same amount of smoke will exit to pollute its lungs. Breathe it until it steals my scent and I can’t even smell Katie’s odor when I see her on my lunch break. I’ll take lightning naps on her shoulder and dream about the places we used to visit when I molded time. (I’ll miss her hair getting tousled by the cliff’s wind and the way her voice sounds with waves on the background. I’ll miss weekdays’ afternoons more than everything when I gathered with some friends and we’d hang around.). I’ll stop seeing Saturday’s sunrise in drunken breath and red eyes because midnight will become a small victory when I lay my head on the fun my friends will have for me.
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My Pieces Tandem There's Nothing As Silent As A Cry Forn Help Carpe Diem One Step New one: Before Your Eyes Last edited by seventh_angel : 02-06-2013 at 11:01 AM. |
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Join Date: Jan 2013
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This is good. It must be someone you still cherish and care for. I know what it's like to have feelings for another person who has moved on. I like the way you include those moments that you are obviously very much in love. Take care and know that it is good to be aware of your feelings for her. Touching... love it.
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Join Date: Feb 2009
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Yep. Lovely. You've totally nailed the feeling of being young and failing to understand middle age.
And done that beautifully. peace
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So-Called New-Age(d) Poet
Join Date: Aug 2007
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Thank you very much !
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My Pieces Tandem There's Nothing As Silent As A Cry Forn Help Carpe Diem One Step New one: Before Your Eyes |
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