03-02-2013, 07:29 AM
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repet it if
Thousands of people
Pile in Making their way, taken their way You're so smart, it kills me I'm excited by the bustle And dangerous tides Highways lead to cities Guided by headlights Driving and driving Like lava, flowing on manmade rock Tired and hungry, I'm thirsty for money Does the trip end when I say? Cities and cities and miles away I love it when I rhyme by mistake I hate it as well, I hate what you sell I'm tired Take me home You can sleep me away |
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03-03-2013, 04:06 PM
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UG Ninja
Join Date: Sep 2006
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Hm, I liked this piece. Simply because of the short lines, you managed to create something that's vast on the image front, and It didn't feel to contrived at all
 And I like the sence of humour in it as well ^^
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03-08-2013, 09:03 PM
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Thank you, sir. I appreciate the kind words. I will try and return the favor by visiting that link in your sig and posting a reply.
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03-11-2013, 10:43 PM
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UG Ninja
Join Date: Sep 2006
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Thanks for taking a look
Check out steven wilson's "drive home" I kinda got that same vibe for this. Even though the lyric context is a little bit different. Keep writing dude
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