mr.retard

i feel guilty for posting in here without ever giving my opinion on the other lyrics in this thread. i read them i just don't know what to say most of the time. sorry

i tried really hard to get the words pursuing happiness into the song but i just couldn't find a way. some day i'm going to add background vocals in the chorus. maybe i can find a way to fit it in there.

verse 1:

for six long years
i've been waiting
for happiness
to come knocking
at my front door

chorus 1:

but now i know
that i need to
open the door
and start the search

verse 2:

and I'm aware
that this will take time
and lots of work
but i just can't wait
not any more

chorus 2:

because i know
that i need to
open the door
and start the search

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RecnepsDaGreat

I think that this is a good start i think there is only one thing that i would look at. I would have to listen to this song with the music, but it looks like it would be a fairly short song, like 1:30. If you want to make it longer I would add another verse before the first chorus, a bridge after the second chorus and the 3rd chorus after that bridge. Keep up the songwriting!

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