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Old 09-23-2013, 12:11 AM   #1
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my room was bare, totally barren
a grey half-open suitcase with clothes spilt out over the concrete
my bed had no sheets, and just one pillow
which i let you have

and, as we sat cross-legged on the floor
you wearing my dad's old west ham sweatshirt
drinking maté from gourds
and taking turns to rack up lines of peruvian
cocaine for eachother on top of one of your medicine books
you said to me "i feel nothing"
and i thought you meant the cocaine

and then,
as we were lying on our backs
afterwards
you with your eyes half-closed
and me watching the monochrome lights from the street
**** around on the ceiling
just Flicker and stray
and flicker and stray
you said,
"language is a darkness pulled out of us"
your voice like a single piece of string in the wind
and i just let it go away

until, overhearing you at the station in chile,
crying on the phone to your mum
"it's just emptiness isn't it?"
i heard you say
and watching you struggle with your bags
as you climbed the steps near the rodoviario
and, god
it was how you didn't look back.
getting further and further away until you were just a blur
like that chekhov story with the man and the woman in the forest
and she watches him go
until finally there's no doubt
and that was it
and you were gone
and i just thought
obviously i'm no philosopher or whatever
but, in my opinion,
yes
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Old 09-23-2013, 10:04 AM   #2
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Except for this line break:
"and taking turns to rack up lines of peruvian
cocaine for eachother on top of one of your medicine books"
which doesn't work for me.

everything else is wonderful.
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Old 09-23-2013, 12:31 PM   #3
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oh, sup Alex, how was the Oxford?
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Old 09-23-2013, 01:08 PM   #4
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thanks seventh.

hey dylan. yeah was great man. i'm actually in the states at the moment - lufkin, texas of all places. how/where abouts are you these days?
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Old 09-23-2013, 03:13 PM   #5
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beyond tight. the conversational/musing tone is nice also.
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Old 09-23-2013, 05:21 PM   #6
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hey alex
I really loved this. like a lot. one of my favorites I've ever read from you, if not my favorite. It's nice to see you checking in. How long are you in TX?
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Old 09-23-2013, 05:37 PM   #7
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Old 09-23-2013, 05:42 PM   #8
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ugh I've been waiting to read something like this
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Old 09-24-2013, 06:10 PM   #9
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extremely dapper.
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Old 09-26-2013, 01:26 PM   #10
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cheers for wotw really appreciate that. hey jimi, in tx just till Monday then in Colombia for a couple of months. are you in texas?
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Old 09-26-2013, 10:39 PM   #11
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nah but will be passing through in the spring to play sxsw and some other shows in the u.s.
colombia should be cool though. only been to cartagena but want to go back.
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Old 09-27-2013, 05:08 PM   #12
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thanks seventh.

hey dylan. yeah was great man. i'm actually in the states at the moment - lufkin, texas of all places. how/where abouts are you these days?


In NYC myself, here studying at Columbia University for my Masters and then probably PhD.

Have a blast down in Colombia. Don't be a stranger!
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Old 09-30-2013, 10:44 AM   #13
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Just love reading this dude. Gives me the chills!
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Old 10-07-2013, 06:01 PM   #14
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Alex. Thanks for taking me back there. I have missed you.
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