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Old 01-13-2014, 07:48 AM   #1
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A Cut Into The Fear (Metal Song) C4C

This is one of my first pieces, that I got back from my hard drive recently. Tell me what you think!

Edit 1: I took out the bridge part, tweaked the solo a little, and added some minor details.

Edit 2: Changed a chord on the choruses and the key of the solo and outro. Deleted blank space between the solo and the outro.

Edit 3: Changed first two bars of the solo to a more fitting lick, added bass line and tweaked drums.

Edit 4: Added vocals line and a last chorus.

Lyrics: http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1631947
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Old 01-13-2014, 08:14 AM   #2
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I somehow see a large Avenged Sevenfold influence, or at least in some parts it sounds like some stuff they could have written (bar 95 onwards sounds almost exactly like Chapter Four) .
I think the structure could have been a bit better and i'm not a huge fan of the dissonant sounding acoustic guitar but if you take the whole piece as a rough draft and rewrite and rearrange it, it could become quite good actually.

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Old 01-13-2014, 10:01 AM   #3
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ye lol that last part is almost an exact copy of chapter four ending.

i would suggest focusing more on creating your own style instead of copying other peoples style , wich will get you nowhere imo.

other than that a lot of your melodies are out of key , wich to me was kind of annoying , and the whole structure of the song wasnt really logical in a progressive way to me , but lyrics might make a difference here.

honestly the only part i liked was what i assume was the chorus at 23-30

it has potential but i think you like i said you focus on creating you own style imo.

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Old 01-13-2014, 08:03 PM   #4
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It is true that Avenged Sevenfold are a huge part of my influences, but I think I have drifted away a little from that on recent works. I used to throw harmonies everywhere (good example here lol), but I'm trying to create my own style, I swear haha!

I'm thinking about taking out the dissonant acoustic thingy, and work on the structure and solo maybe.

I also agree that the chord progression on the outro is similar to Chapter Four, but I think that lyrics can make it different. Basically all chord progressions have been written anyway lol.

Thanks a lot for the comments!



On a side note: MobiuZ, I can't seem to open .gpx files, is there any other way I can listen to your song?

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Old 01-16-2014, 10:11 PM   #5
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It is true that Avenged Sevenfold are a huge part of my influences, but I think I have drifted away a little from that on recent works. I used to throw harmonies everywhere (good example here lol), but I'm trying to create my own style, I swear haha!

I'm thinking about taking out the dissonant acoustic thingy, and work on the structure and solo maybe.

I also agree that the chord progression on the outro is similar to Chapter Four, but I think that lyrics can make it different. Basically all chord progressions have been written anyway lol.

Thanks a lot for the comments!



On a side note: MobiuZ, I can't seem to open .gpx files, is there any other way I can listen to your song?


yes there is a link to my soundcloud in the thread u can listen to that if u want

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