01-28-2013, 04:24 PM
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Registered User
Join Date: Jan 2013
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never crossed lovers
We lived in a space between now and then
held in tenderness of when if feeling left alone with grace of God embraced your bones times won’t hold the wills of if not when it takes your soul and binds your pith you lost me to if (when) Now couldn’t hold you and Sooner became an uncrossable sea. Last edited by jaybearch : 01-28-2013 at 04:25 PM. Reason: minor edit |
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01-29-2013, 11:59 AM
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Biology student
Join Date: Nov 2009
Location: the Netherlands
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Amazing. Very well done.
If I had to criticise something, it would be the line "not when it takes your soul and binds your pith". I somehow get stuck on that one every time I read it.
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You who build these altars now
To sacrifice these children You must not do it anymore
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01-29-2013, 03:55 PM
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Weeow!
Join Date: Mar 2006
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good shit man
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