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Old 03-07-2013, 12:33 PM   #1
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Originally Posted by laid-to-waste
look nigga, if you're chillin with 5 bros and 2 hos, you're gonna wanna pay attention to all of em equally. not moon over the hos forever and laugh at every shitty thing they say and just stare at them all night, like some of my mates do.

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Old 03-10-2013, 12:46 PM   #2
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This seems like it could have been half a stanza, but pulled out into a full piece. It's a good idea, man. A really good one, but I think you need to take this one back to the forge and give it some more shape.

Keep on with this one, I think I'm going to really like where it goes.

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