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Old 07-16-2013, 12:10 AM   #1
sarabarryy
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can someone put chords to this song?

This is a song of mine and I just wanted some constructive criticism and feedback. Also if anyone could figure out any chords or music to put to this song




Down this winding road
He wants to know will it take me where

I need to go, thereís no escape
To this life he said Iím aware

Climbed through these lines and vines
But didnít make it out

And never had an answer why
Just always seemed to be in doubt

Chorus
Thereís a shadow he hides behind
But everything he feels is still inside
He canít put it aside

All this time Iíve tried to find
The reason its all bottled up inside

Verse 2
The pieces of his life, he took apart
Never found them, he hid them from the start

Hidden in the dark
On the inside heís torn apart

But Itís just dull and dry
No reason to even cry

Chorus
Thereís a shadow he hides behind
But everything he feels is still inside
He canít put it aside

All this time Iíve tried to find
The reason its all bottled up inside

Bridge
Trapped on the blind side
With chains to his head
He said Iíll run away and make up for the
Tears Iíve shed

Chorus
Thereís a shadow he hides behind
But everything he feels is still inside
He canít put it aside

All this time Iíve tried to find
the reason its bottled up inside

Outro
Everything you feel canít be inside
Canít just put it aside
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Old 07-16-2013, 12:23 AM   #2
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I liked the lyrics, they are really good in my opinion. I was going to think of some chords for them, but my guitar string broke and I don't have any strings right now(forgot to order some).
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Old 07-16-2013, 12:36 AM   #3
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Step 1: Sing it out loud. Record yourself.
Step 2: Pick up a guitar and strum some chords over the recording.
Step 3: Try different chords for each part until it sounds right.
If you do it yourself, it'll sound more like what you had in mind.
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Old 07-16-2013, 12:44 AM   #4
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Thanks both of you guys
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Old 07-17-2013, 11:01 AM   #5
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Ill do it. When I get home today later.
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Old 07-25-2013, 10:45 PM   #6
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1 4 5 Add A Minor Chord Set Up Your Beat ...i Just Played Your Song To My Style Sounded Awsome And Pick Your Key That You Sing In
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Old 07-25-2013, 11:21 PM   #7
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I would, but you dint even give a melody or anything to work with musically.
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Old 07-26-2013, 01:13 PM   #8
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1 4 5 Add A Minor Chord Set Up Your Beat ...i Just Played Your Song To My Style Sounded Awsome And Pick Your Key That You Sing In

You There Maybe You Can Answer A Question That's Been Bugging Me For A While ...Why Do People Type Like This Its Annoying ...And Now That Thats Done I Cant Understand A Single Word Of Your Post
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Old 07-27-2013, 02:28 PM   #9
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You There Maybe You Can Answer A Question That's Been Bugging Me For A While ...Why Do People Type Like This Its Annoying ...And Now That Thats Done I Cant Understand A Single Word Of Your Post



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Old 07-31-2013, 04:16 PM   #10
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I know this will come off as me being an asshole to you.

With that being said, don't narrow down on your personal weaknesses and turn them into yet another boring set of lyrics. Go out and do something in your life that makes you ecstatic and write down what you are feeling then, being ambiguous and entertaining at the same time. Depressive doldrums of words have been done countless times and they are ****ing boring.

If this strikes you as rude instead of criticism then so be it.

edit: I hope you mostly wanted criticism on the lyrics and not someone coming up with a melody to YOUR song. Pick up a guitar and mess around until you like it enough to record. This is music, not poetry with meaningless backing sounds.
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