weorge

I think I posted this song to UG about 6 months ago but the audio quality was terrible, anyway let me know what you think and I'll do the same for you I'm in the process of recording it properly so I thought I'd try and get some feedback on the actual song before I've put in too much work. Cheers!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Aaea...=1&feature=plcp

It's money first, money next and money last.
It's a sad day when they put a price on a laugh.
So let me tell you something quite deppressing I have found,
money seems to make the world go around.

It's a saddenning way, you need something you gotta pay, and those who can't are lost, it's societies cost. Acid rain falls again.

The way in and the way out is forward.
There aint no point turning back.
Because there is a reason that we left that place.
We all knew that it was pretty crap.

and every place I go, makes me miss my home, but I'm not sure where that is, maybe it's yet to appear. Acid rain falls again.

Time scares the shit outa me.
because I'm always running out.
I spend so much of it oh wondoring where it goes.
The only answer i got is **** knows.

I've fallen into that trap, of trying to take it all back, it's your greatest friend, but it kills you in the end. Acid rain falls again.

Acid rain falling from the sky, burns my face, burns my face.
I'm always stuck between a rock and a hard place, hard place.
there hangs a poison rainbow, black and yellow, black and yellow.
The acid rain falls again, again.

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BigSmokeDawg

Nice song dude! That was really nice to listen to. I really liked the chord progression you used in the pre-chorus combined with the vocals. The lyrics are also pretty darn good, and they go nicely with the guitar. Get this properly recorded and it'd sound mint!

Stuff like this makes me think I should get an acoustic myself

That ending was really great too!

Could I have some feedback on this? - http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1573204

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Toadvine

Good stuff man, nice chord progression, nice melody. Great punk feel.

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