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Old 01-28-2013, 04:24 PM   #1
jaybearch
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never crossed lovers

We lived in a space between now and then
held in tenderness of when

if
feeling left alone
with grace of God
embraced your bones

times won’t hold the wills of if
not when it takes your soul and binds your pith

you lost me to if
(when)

Now couldn’t hold you
and
Sooner became an uncrossable sea.

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Old 01-29-2013, 11:59 AM   #2
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Amazing. Very well done.

If I had to criticise something, it would be the line "not when it takes your soul and binds your pith". I somehow get stuck on that one every time I read it.
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Old 01-29-2013, 03:55 PM   #3
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good shit man
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