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Old 11-08-2012, 05:42 PM   #1
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Ermahgerds! (metal) C4C

So, this is a song that started out as a few riffs I wrote when I was drunk and mopey and now its done ! with most(by most I mean abt 60%) of the tracks recorded sober ! Also theres no bass guitar in the mix.

Anyways, I'll be sure to C4C. Looking forward to ure responses !

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This is still a very rough mix and all I'm looking for is musical crit.

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Old 11-08-2012, 06:46 PM   #2
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Private track? Because the link is not working
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Old 11-08-2012, 06:55 PM   #3
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Sorry abt that ! Yeah it was set to private. You can check it now
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Old 11-08-2012, 07:40 PM   #4
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I assume this is the track you were trying to link .. I actually quite liked it, other than the super sterility of the mix. The riffing was pretty damn rad, it started off very pantera-ish and slowly worked its way to death metal, with a necrophagist-esque solo thrown in there which I quite liked. It flowed well, kept me interested and would make a good song if properly recorded and mixed. Good shit man, keep it up
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Old 11-08-2012, 08:13 PM   #5
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0 - .57 I thought were a bit slow could use something else maybe a background lead track?

.58-.59 nice change up

1.00 - 1,28 my favorite part needs more of this IMO

1.36 - 2.07 would be bad ass if you harmonized another guitar track in there...

2.08 - 2.24 kick ass licks I likey

2.26 - to the end I dunno i did get carpal tunnel though. Maybe another lead track here to round it out?

Overall I thought it could kick some ass!

Thanks for the crit!
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Old 11-09-2012, 01:59 AM   #6
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the_weirdoman,
Playing is tight, good riffs. Yep, it needs some electric bass. Some cool guitar pitch bends. Drums are OK, but they'd sound better with the electric bass. You're off to a good start (assuming you'll do more with it). Please review my music at this link:

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Old 11-09-2012, 10:02 AM   #7
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Writing is very good. I think, production wise, playing could be a tad tighter. Guitars need to sit back so the drums can be brought out. Reallllllly needs bass but I understand if you don't have access to one. What I would recommend, though, is maybe looking up and purchasing the Zombass Kontakt instrument. That baby killsssss for programming bass. Just a thought. Top track, I'd be stoked!
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Old 11-10-2012, 05:28 AM   #8
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thanks all you guys for the feedback ! I don't think I can get it to be anymore tighter (1 year down the line and I'm still plagued by Redlight fever)

Hopefully once the mix is fully done, It'll sound much better. Till then, you're stuck listening to my crappy mix
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Old 11-10-2012, 08:29 PM   #9
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Mostly criting mix here, would really need to hear how vocals fit in to judge the song properly but.

Cant really crit the mix either since its just a rough mix but the sounds..

Sounds like i'm hearing Ezdrummer and Pod Farm or something like that.

The Riffs are tight, I like that! I like the snare though what are you using for drums?
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Old 11-10-2012, 09:08 PM   #10
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Hey man, listening and writing:
Starts off pretty kickass man, great sound quality. Very Lamb of God (which I love!). you got some great ideas here man, impressive. I like that guitar dip and then into the new section, very cool and melodic. The ride here complements it well! Nice solo too! Overall good stuff man, when bass and vocals are added it would sound even more br00tz, you're very talented
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Old 11-10-2012, 10:15 PM   #11
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Hey man, listening now.

First riff's cool, definitely has a good structure to it and flows into the next bit well. I am assuming the vocals should be cutting in over the palm muted riff here. I can hear Phil Anselmo singing over this in my head.

Like the riff with the slur bend that follows too, and the stabbing dissonant harmonies. The harmonies that follow remind me a fair bit of something Kurt Ballou would do on earlier Converge records.

Solo kicking in at the two minute mark is good, sensing a strong thrash influence... too short though.

Tremolo part around 3 minutes in is pretty cool... adding the bass in will really increase the poignancy of that part. Ending was an easy way to wrap it up.

Overall good, production quality high esp for an early mix but you gotta finish it up with the vocals and bass man.

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Old 11-11-2012, 01:48 AM   #12
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Mostly criting mix here, would really need to hear how vocals fit in to judge the song properly but.

Cant really crit the mix either since its just a rough mix but the sounds..

Sounds like i'm hearing Ezdrummer and Pod Farm or something like that.

The Riffs are tight, I like that! I like the snare though what are you using for drums?


Yup I'm using EZDrummer Metalheads and LePou plugins. (I'm a brokeass nigga)

As stated above this is a very rough mix and not the final one. I'm looking for crits on my composition and songwriting ( while also drawing your attention away from my very shitty mixing abilities )

I'd love to have vocals in my songs, except that I can't growl for $#it. I have the patterns and lyrics written down. Hopefull will get them done someday
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Old 11-25-2012, 03:48 PM   #13
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try to pick harder or reduce the amount of gating on the guitars, it will sound a bit more punchy
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Old 11-25-2012, 06:07 PM   #14
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The guitars are pretty sweet, but they are just a little muddy. I really dig that tone though and if you could refine it they would shine in this song.

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